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A popular hobby than a favorite passtime

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Nowadays people like to change their day by day activities according to the latest trends and also they are following popular things what their surrounding peoples make them popular in their area. This essay will explain the reason why the people are spending more time for popular hobbies rather than their individual activities. Hobbies and interest are different for everyone; this is the human nature, which is given by god. The current generations peoples are very much interest in the latest trend which makes them happy and also help them to make more money. For example, cricket is the most famous game in many of the country, children and teen ages are starts playing it whenever they have free time in their daily life. This makes them will become a star in this game when they reach a certain age in their life. In addition, this popularity will help them to make lots of money in their life. Beside this, there are many hobby changes the peoples entire life into different way. Those are from poor family aiming to spend more time to make money rather than on their own interests. However, some of them are not worry about the popular hobbies and interests. For instance, drinking alcohol is one of the popular hobbies between low income and high level budget peoples interest. In conclusion, _spending more time for popular hobbies and interests really depends on their surrounding people's activity and environments. It may be a helpful for them to become a star in their life or spending time with many friends.
Nowadays
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people
like to
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change
their day by day activities according to the latest trends and
also
they are following
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popular
things what their surrounding
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peoples
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make
them
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popular
in their area. This essay will
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explain
the reason why the
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people
are spending more time

for
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popular
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hobbies
rather
than their individual activities.

Hobbies and
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interest
are
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different
for everyone; this is the human nature, which is
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given
by god. The
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current
generations
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peoples
are
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very
much
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interest
in the latest trend which
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makes
them happy and
also
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help
them to
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make
more money.
For example
, cricket is the most
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famous
game in
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many
of the country, children and teen ages are
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starts
playing it whenever they have free
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time
in their daily
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life
. This
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makes
them will become a star in this game when they reach a certain age in their
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life
.
In addition
, this popularity will
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help
them to
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make
lots of money in their
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life
. Beside this, there are
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many
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hobby
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changes
the
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peoples
entire
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life
into
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different
way.

Those are from poor family aiming to spend more
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time
to
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make
money
rather
than on their
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own
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interests
.
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,
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some
of them are not worry about the
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popular
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hobbies
and
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interests
.
For instance
, drinking alcohol is one of the
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popular
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hobbies
between low income and high level budget
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peoples
interest.

In conclusion
, _spending more
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time
for
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popular
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hobbies
and
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interests
really
depends on their surrounding
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people
's activity and environments. It may be a helpful for them to become a star in their
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life
or spending
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time
with
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many
friends.
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IELTS essay A popular hobby than a favorite passtime

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
262 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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