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A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

As time has changed, people’s mindsets are also altered to a great extent. In today’s era, people are valued on basis of their financial status while the belief of regarding mankind for their kindness, trust and honesty has completely vanished. I completely agree with this fact because of its sheer obvious existence. This essay will discuss why social status has become an important factor to judge people with provision of relevant reasoning and examples. It is not very uncommon to see individuals who have the sense of sticking to old fashioned values. Considerable number of people still carry the orthodox view which value humans beings based on their kind and honest nature. For example, last year while I was working as a teacher in a college, I come across some parents who praised the teachers who followed a polite and kind method for teaching children. Such people can be counted as a proof that old culture is still being followed and honour, kindness and trust is appreciated in an individual’s personality. Although we all may know somebody who admire human beings because of their kind nature, the ratio of such people has outnumbered by a lot when compared to the people who care about social and financial status over everything else. This means that money is given extreme importance and we are technically living in a materialistic society. For instance, a recent research conducted at St. John Fisher College revealed that almost 85% of respondents (aged 20 – 25) answered that they will prefer being friends with students who own fancy cars and extravagant houses. Similar survey was taken in an informal environment targeting audience at corporate companies which resulted likewise. For these reasons it is highly believed that social and financial credibility holds immense importance nowadays. To recapitulate, we may find some people who give utmost importance to kind nature, loyalty and honesty, however the amount of individuals preferring financial status has substantially increased. This essay discussed both viewpoints in light of evidences and also provided reasons why I completely agree that a person’s worth is now judged according to social status and material possessions.
As time has
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people’s
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altered to a great extent. In
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today
’s era,
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people
are valued
on basis of their
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financial
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status
while the belief of regarding mankind for their kindness, trust and honesty has completely vanished. I completely
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agree
with this fact
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because
of its sheer obvious existence. This essay will discuss why
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social
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status
has become an
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important
factor to judge
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people
with provision of relevant reasoning and examples.

It is not
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very
uncommon to
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individuals
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who
have the sense of sticking to
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old fashioned
values. Considerable number of
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people
still
carry the orthodox view which value
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humans beings
based on their
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kind
and honest nature.
For example
, last year while I was working as a teacher in a college, I
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come
across
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some
parents
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who
praised the teachers
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who
followed a polite and
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kind
method for teaching children. Such
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people
can
be counted
as a proof that
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old
culture is
still
being followed
and
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honour
, kindness and trust
is appreciated
in an individual’s personality.

Although we all may know somebody
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who
admire human beings
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because
of their
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kind
nature, the ratio of such
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people
has outnumbered by a lot when compared to the
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people
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who
care about
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social
and
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financial
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status
over everything else. This means that money is
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given
extreme
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importance and
we are
technically
living in a materialistic society.
For instance
, a recent research conducted at St. John Fisher College revealed that almost 85% of respondents (aged 20 – 25) answered that they will prefer being friends with students
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who
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own
fancy cars and extravagant
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houses
. Similar survey
was taken
in an informal environment targeting audience at corporate
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companies
which resulted
likewise
. For these reasons it is
highly
believed that
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social
and
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financial
credibility holds immense importance nowadays.

To recapitulate, we may find
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some
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people
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who
give utmost importance to
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kind
nature, loyalty and honesty,
however
the amount of individuals preferring
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financial
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status
has
substantially
increased. This essay discussed both viewpoints in light of evidences and
also
provided reasons why I completely
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agree
that a person’s worth is
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now
judged according to
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social
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status
and material possessions.
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IELTS essay A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. with this opinion?

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