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a number of young volunteers desire to work on a daily basis aiming to benefit both society and individuals. However, it is enforceable that they ought to work without payment.

a number of young volunteers desire to work on a daily basis aiming to benefit both society and individuals. However, it is enforceable that they ought to work without payment. pK8K2
a number of young volunteers desire to work on a daily basis aiming to benefit both society and individuals. However, it is enforceable that they ought to work without payment. Most young people are under lots of pressure from their studies. Indeed, they are tackling not only a variety of tasks assigned by the teachers but also examinations at schools. Therefore, it is imperative that their free time should be prioritized for their social life such as hanging out with friends, playing sports, etc. They still have many years of work ahead when they graduate. At the same time, I do not believe that society has anything to gain from obliging the youth to do unpaid work. I would argue that our action could deprive their right to experience the job that they want to do. Worse yet, it definitely goes against the value of a fair and free society when we compel the children to work free. Doing this can lead to resentment amongst young people, which makes them feel that they are being used and exploited. All in all, Albeitteenagers are able to choose whether work for free or help others, it should not be compulsory.
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number of young volunteers desire to
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on a daily basis aiming to benefit both society and individuals.
However
, it is enforceable that they ought to
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work
without payment.

Most young
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are under lots of pressure from their studies.
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a variety of tasks assigned by the teachers
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also
examinations at schools.
Therefore
, it is imperative that their
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free
time should
be prioritized
for their social life such as hanging out with friends, playing sports, etc. They
still
have
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years of
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work
ahead when they graduate.

At the same time, I do not believe that society has anything to gain from obliging the youth to do unpaid
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work
. I would argue that our action could deprive their right to experience the job that they want to do. Worse
yet
, it definitely goes against the value of a
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fair
and
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free
society when we compel the children to
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work
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
free
. Doing this can lead to resentment amongst young
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people
, which
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makes
them feel that they are being
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used
and exploited.

All in all,
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for
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free
or
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help
others, it should not be compulsory.
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IELTS essay a number of young volunteers desire to work on a daily basis aiming to benefit both society and individuals. However, it is enforceable that they ought to work without payment.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
198 words
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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