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A lot of places on the world rely on tourism as a main source of income. Unfortunately, tourism can also be a source of problems if it is not managed correctly. Describe the advantages and disadvantages of tourism in the modern world. Do you think that benefits of tourism outweighs its drawback? v.2

Nowadays tourism generates a significant portion of national income for many countries, but it has certain drawbacks too. This essay will examine the advantages and disadvantages of tourism and provide a logical conclusion. The two main advantages of developed tourism industry are boost in country’s economy and a large number of new job openings for the local people. Firstly, tourists spend money on a wide range of services, including hotels, amusements, transportation, food and medical services. This way, tourism yields an additional income, greatly supporting the country’s economy. Secondly, tourism increases the level of employment by bringing new jobs. For instance, the influx of tourists results in a larger demand in restaurant workers, tour guides, hotel staff and employees of retail services, exhorting business owners to hire more people for these positions. But tourism also has some major disadvantages like destruction of popular tourist destinations and development of illegal economic activities. іAncient buildings, temples and monuments struggle to cope with a vast amount of visitor’s traffic and get damaged. Also, the large number of tourists can cause environmental problems. For instance, when places of interest are overcrowded, natural resources often become overexploited. What’s more, the presence of a considerable number of tourists with a lot of money to spend, and often carrying valuables such as cameras and jewelry, increases the attraction for criminals and brings with it activities like robbery and drug dealing. However, proper hospitality management and correct usage of tourism revenue by the local government can eliminate these disadvantages. To conclude, although tourism can have certain negative effects like destructive impact and growth of crime rate, it has an extremely positive influence on country’s economy and provides a large number of new jobs for the local people. I believe that these benefits of tourism outweigh its drawbacks.
Nowadays
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generates a significant portion of national income for
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countries
,
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it has certain drawbacks too. This essay will examine the advantages and disadvantages of
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tourism
and provide a logical conclusion.

The two main advantages of developed
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tourism
industry are boost in
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country’s
economy and a large
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number
of new job openings for the local
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people
.
Firstly
,
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tourists
spend money on a wide range of services, including hotels, amusements, transportation, food and medical services. This way,
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tourism
yields an additional income,
greatly
supporting the
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country’s
economy.
Secondly
,
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tourism
increases the level of employment by bringing new jobs.
For instance
, the influx of
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tourists
results in a larger demand in restaurant workers, tour guides, hotel staff and employees of retail services, exhorting business owners to hire more
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people
for these positions.

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But
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tourism
also
has
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major disadvantages like destruction of popular
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destinations and development of illegal economic activities.
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buildings, temples and monuments struggle to cope with a vast amount of visitor’s traffic and
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damaged.
Also
, the large
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number
of
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tourists
can cause environmental problems.
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, natural resources
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overexploited
. What’s more, the presence of a considerable
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of
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tourists
with
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a lot of
money to spend, and
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often
carrying valuables such as cameras and jewelry, increases the attraction for criminals and brings with it activities like robbery and drug dealing.
However
, proper hospitality management and correct usage of
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tourism
revenue by the local
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government
can eliminate these disadvantages.

To conclude
, although
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can have certain
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negative
effects like destructive impact and growth of crime rate, it has an
extremely
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positive
influence on
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country’s
economy and provides a large
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number
of new jobs for the local
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people
. I believe that these benefits of
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tourism
outweigh its drawbacks.
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IELTS essay A lot of places in the world rely on tourism as a main source of income. Unfortunately, tourism can also be a source of problems if it is not managed correctly. Describe the advantages and disadvantages of tourism in the modern world. Do you think that benefits of tourism outweight its drawbacks?

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