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A large number of foods are delivered from distant places at present, some residents concern about this fact and they suggest that we should consume only regional foods for their environmental and economical profits.

A large number of foods are delivered from distant places at present, some residents concern about this fact and they suggest that we should consume only regional foods for their environmental and economical profits. YyeMr
A large number of foods are delivered from distant places at present, some residents concern about this fact and they suggest that we should consume only regional foods for their environmental and economical profits. Personally, I believe that the advantages of this choice are outweighed its disadvatage. On the one hand, it is undeniable that eating local comestibles brings benefits to not only us but also to our hometown's nature as well as its economy. In term of ecological profits, using domestic products help citizens to protect the environment. Local delivery obviously reduces food miles and our carbon footprint on way. Moreover, some outside products are harmful to the local fauna as it can harbour diseases along with the shipping process and in supermarkets. In term of economical gains, the regional foods keep the local producers more wealthy. In other words, they make more money thanks to the cheap ship fee to the local sellers. Besides, this creates more job demand in logistic or production for the local residents. On the other hand, there is an inconvenience while not using imported food. In particular, our selection of food is not diversified. Various products especially vegetables can't be made regionally due to specific climate condition. For example, in Vietnam, it is hard to cultivate wheat, so we have to import flour to use. Besides, foreign food quality is often higher than the native one because of its better technology. In conclusion, despite the drawback, I think that consuming domestic cosmetibles should be encouraged for its economical and natural benefits.
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are delivered
from distant places at present,
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some
residents concern about this
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fact and
they suggest that we should consume
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only
regional
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foods
for their environmental and economical profits.
Personally
, I believe that the advantages of this choice
are outweighed
its
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disadvatage
.

On the one hand, it is undeniable that eating
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local
comestibles brings benefits to not
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only
us
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but
also
to our hometown's nature
as well
as its economy. In term of ecological profits, using domestic products
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help
citizens to protect the environment.
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Local
delivery
obviously
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reduces
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food
miles and our carbon footprint on way.
Moreover
,
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some
outside products are harmful to the
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local
fauna as it can
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harbour
diseases along with the shipping process and in supermarkets. In term of economical gains, the regional
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foods
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keep
the
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local
producers more wealthy.
In other words
, they
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make
more money thanks to the
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cheap
ship fee to the
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local
sellers.
Besides
, this creates more job demand in logistic or production for the
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local
residents.

On the other hand
, there is an inconvenience while not using imported
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food
.
In particular
, our selection of
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food
is not diversified. Various products
especially
vegetables can't
be made
regionally
due to specific climate condition.
For example
, in Vietnam, it is
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hard
to cultivate wheat,
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so
we
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have to
import flour to
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use
.
Besides
, foreign
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food
quality is
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often
higher than the native one
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because
of its better technology.

In conclusion
, despite the drawback, I
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think
that consuming domestic
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cosmetibles
should
be encouraged
for its economical and natural benefits.
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IELTS essay A large number of foods are delivered from distant places at present, some residents concern about this fact and they suggest that we should consume only regional foods for their environmental and economical profits.

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6.0
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