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A job for life is no longer a reality. Many people are now employed on short-term contracts. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this kind of employment for employees? v.1

A job for life is no longer a reality. Many people are now employed on short-term contracts. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this kind of employment for employees? v. 1
In the today’s society, we do not have a certainty of a job for life. Many people are now employed on short-term contracts and this is very different if we analyse the work’s world of 20/30 years ago. Often, the change is positive but not always. I do not have many years of experience, so I’m not talking about my experience, but I can see other people in their work’s world. In this mode, I can take many information and analyse them. There are advantages about this short-term works. The most important is that it is not boring. I think that, do the same work for life, it is boring. This approach to work is stressing and less productive, in my personal opinion. In every contest, a worker wants to be motivated or receive new stimulus, and short-term contracts consent it. When the contract finish, the worker can change everything: the type of work, the company, the things that he do at work or the location where he lives. This can be an advantage but also a disadvantage. Many people want to be stabled, with a stable work: in this way, they can make a family and have a home. Not just the place where they live, but the place where they want to grow up with their partner and sons. It is very difficult to put this last aspect in the advantages or disadvantages. To sum up, the world of work is changed and, probably, will change again. Some people do not like these changes, but some people love them. The only way to have success, is adapting mind to change and take the positive aspects.
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employed on short-term contracts and this is
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different
if we
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world of 20/30 years ago.
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change
is
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positive
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years of experience,
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other
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in their
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world. In this mode, I can take
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many information
and
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them. There are advantages about this short-term works. The most
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is that it is not boring. I
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that, do the same
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for life, it is boring. This approach to
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is stressing and less productive, in my personal opinion. In every contest, a worker wants to
be motivated
or receive new stimulus, and short-term contracts consent it. When the contract finish, the worker can
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change
everything: the type of
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work
, the
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company
, the things that he do at
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work
or the location where he
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lives
. This can be an advantage
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also
a disadvantage.
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want to
be stabled
, with a stable
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work
: in this way, they can
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make
a family and have a home. Not
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just
the place where they
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,
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the place where they want to grow up with their partner and sons. It is
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difficult to put this last aspect in the advantages or disadvantages. To sum up, the world of
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work
is
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changed
and,
probably
, will
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change
again.
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people
do not like these
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,
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love
them. The
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only
way to have success, is adapting mind to
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change
and take the
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positive
aspects.
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IELTS essay A job for life is no longer a reality. Many people are now employed on short-term contracts. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this kind of employment for employees? v. 1

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
277 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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