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A house on fire. How to save.

A house on fire. How to save. PEqld
Fire is a good servant but it is a bad master. Yesterday, I was returning home from school when I saw a house on fire. The smoke was coming through the window. The people were running to and fro. I soon went home and rang up the fire brigade. Soon, the flames and clouds of smoke started touching the sky. The people of the nearby houses vacated their houses. The owner of the house was weeping bitterly. His only son had been left sleeping in the upper story. By this time, a large number of people gathered there. No one had the courage to take risk of his own life. I brought a ladder and placed it against the wall. I darted up like an arrow. I brought the child safe and sound on my arms. All the people praised me. Soon the fire-brigade was rung up. The fire engines arrived and the fire-men set about their work. They began playing the house in various parts of the building. They fought hard with the flames and tried to bring the fire under control. At last, they succeeded in putting it out before morning. The whole building was reduced to ashes. There was a great loss of property, but thank God, there was no loss of life.
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master. Yesterday, I was returning home from school when I
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on
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. The smoke was coming through the window. The
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people
were running to and fro. I
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soon
went home and rang up the
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brigade.

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, the flames and clouds of smoke
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started
touching the sky. The
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people
of the nearby
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vacated their
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houses
. The owner of the
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house
was weeping
bitterly
. His
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only
son had been
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left
sleeping in the upper story.

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gathered there. No one had the courage to take
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life. I brought a ladder and placed it against the wall. I darted up like an arrow.
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brought the child safe and sound on my arms. All the
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praised me.

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the fire-brigade
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up. The
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engines arrived and the fire-
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men
set about their work. They began playing the
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house
in various parts of the building. They fought
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hard
with the flames and tried to bring the
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fire
under control. At last, they succeeded in putting it out
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before
morning.

The whole building was
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reduced
to ashes. There was a great loss of property,
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thank God, there was no loss of life.
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IELTS essay A house on fire. How to save.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
216 words
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 7.0
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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