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a healthy person is often described as someone who has a good diet, gets plenty of exercise and avoids stress. what should people do to stay healthy in your country? v.1

a healthy person is often described as someone who has a good diet, gets plenty of exercise and avoids stress. what should people do to stay healthy in your country? v. 1
It is incontrovertible that healthy and safety lifestyles embody healthy and balance diet, doing more and more exercises, and keeping away from stressful situations. Accordingly, a couple of reasons for being healthy in our country, Iran, will be explored in this essay. First of all, having a balance diet plays an indispensable role in society health. To clarify, if our body receives an adequate amount of essential and vital materials such as fat, carbohydrate, and vegetables, we will be healthy individuals. In my country, Iran, which has four distinct seasons, indigenous individuals should pay meticulous attention to make a balance between their taste and compatible food with each certain season. For instance, in the fall, in our province, Yasouj, compromising between warm and cool taste should be taken into account through eating kitchen soup so that our body can endure against freezing temperature. Hence, equilibrium and parity among our diet can prevent to the outbreak of ailments such as diabetes, heart disease, or other life-threatening illnesses. In addition, sport is another important measure for being as a healthy member of our society due to the evidence that a healthy lifestyle is inextricably intertwined with diverse types of sport. In order to keep away from disease, and sedentary lifestyle, we have no choice but to put desired sport such as swimming, football or gymnastics in our daily schedule. Take professor Kardavani as a shinning sample of a healthy person in our country which do exercise tremendously in his life. Consuming fresh fruits and vegetables during exercising would be beneficial if you do heavy sports like body building. Consequently, sport should be embedded in extracurricular activities, which not only make a contribution to have a healthy lifestyle, but provide assistance to change and fresh your mood. In conclusion, it can be restated that through balance diet, doing exercise frequently, and get out the vice grips of the stressful situations, we will be a healthy member of our community. By doing this, I aver that disease statistics will be down and triumph come to feel.
It is incontrovertible that
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healthy
and safety
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lifestyles
embody
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healthy
and
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balance
diet, doing more and more exercises, and keeping away from stressful situations.
Accordingly
, a couple of reasons for being
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healthy
in our country, Iran, will
be explored
in this essay.

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First of all
, having a
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balance
diet plays an indispensable role in society health. To clarify, if our body receives an adequate amount of essential and vital materials such as
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fat
, carbohydrate, and vegetables, we will be
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healthy
individuals. In my country, Iran, which has four distinct seasons, indigenous individuals should pay meticulous attention to
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make
a
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balance
between their taste and compatible food with each certain season.
For instance
, in the fall, in our province,
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Yasouj
, compromising between warm and cool taste should
be taken
into account through eating kitchen soup
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so
that our body can endure against freezing temperature.
Hence
, equilibrium and parity among our diet can
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prevent
to the outbreak of ailments such as diabetes, heart disease, or other life-threatening illnesses.

In addition
,
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sport
is another
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important
measure for being as a
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healthy
member of our society due to the evidence that a
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healthy
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lifestyle
is
inextricably
intertwined with diverse types of
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sport
. In order to
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keep
away from disease, and sedentary
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lifestyle
, we have no choice
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but
to put desired
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sport
such as swimming, football or gymnastics in our daily schedule. Take professor
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Kardavani
as a shinning sample of a
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healthy
person in our country which do exercise
tremendously
in his life. Consuming fresh fruits and vegetables during exercising would be beneficial if you do heavy
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sports
like body building.
Consequently
,
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sport
should
be embedded
in extracurricular activities, which not
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only
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make
a contribution to have a
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healthy
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lifestyle
,
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but
provide assistance to
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change
and fresh your mood.

In conclusion
, it can
be restated
that through
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balance
diet, doing exercise
frequently
, and
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get
out the vice grips of the stressful situations, we will be a
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healthy
member of our community. By doing this, I aver that disease statistics will be down and triumph
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come
to feel.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay a healthy person is often described as someone who has a good diet, gets plenty of exercise and avoids stress. what should people do to stay healthy in your country? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
342 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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