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A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. Discuss both views and give your opinion v.25

A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. 25
There is an increasing number of people believes that animals should not be exploited and should be treated fairly same as humans while others claims that animals should be utilized to help people in various kinds of ways, such as the source of food and for medical testing. This essay will discuss both the viewpoints and provide an opinion. On the one hand people say that have the same right as humans and should therefore be protected against the cruel treatment on behalf of humans. Moreover, all living things make up a balanced ecosystem and all things have rightful place and consideration. Animals are sentient being as well. Like humans, they have the ability to express emotions such as pain, fear, happiness, and despair. To prove this fact, there have been several experiments done on animals which clearly proves that they feel the same amount of suffering and loss as humans do. On the other hand, some people think that animals provide various needs of people. Firstly, human population exploits a number of animals for food, including pig, cow and chicken poultry. They are being raised as a food and provide products that are important to everyday life. For example, is the pork, it is widely consumed meat in the world and people eat different products like bacon, sausage and pork chop. Secondly, animals attributed to many lifesaving cures and treatments. Animal testing aids researchers in finding drugs and treatments to improve health and medicine. Take for instance, dogs had their pancreas removed led directly to the discovery of insulin, which help to save critical cases of people with diabetics. In conclusion, people has their different views towards the exploitation of animals, others argue that animals should be treated same as human while others do not. In my opinion, I am firm that there is no problem with employing animals to people’s needs as long as they are not being abused.
There is an increasing number of
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people
believes that
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animals
should not
be exploited
and should
be treated
fairly
same as
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humans
while others claims that
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animals
should
be utilized
to
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help
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people
in various kinds of ways, such as the source of food and for medical testing. This essay will discuss both the viewpoints and provide an opinion.

On the one hand
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people
say that have the same right as
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humans
and should
therefore
be protected
against the cruel treatment on behalf of
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humans
.
Moreover
, all living things
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make
up a balanced ecosystem and all things have rightful place and consideration.
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Animals
are sentient being
as well
. Like
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humans
, they have the ability to express emotions such as pain, fear, happiness, and despair. To prove this fact, there have been several experiments done on
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animals
which
clearly
proves that they feel the same amount of suffering and loss as
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humans
do.

On the
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other
hand,
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some
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people
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think
that
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animals
provide various needs of
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people
.
Firstly
,
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human
population exploits a number of
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animals
for food, including pig, cow and chicken poultry. They are
being raised
as a food and provide products that are
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important
to everyday life.
For example
, is the pork, it is
widely
consumed meat in the world and
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people
eat
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different
products like bacon, sausage and pork chop.
Secondly
,
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animals
attributed to
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many
lifesaving cures and treatments.
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Animal
testing aids researchers in finding drugs and treatments to
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improve
health and medicine. Take
for instance
, dogs had their pancreas removed led
directly
to the discovery of insulin, which
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help
to save critical cases of
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people
with diabetics.

In conclusion
,
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people
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has
their
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different
views towards the exploitation of
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animals
, others argue that
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animals
should
be treated
same as
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human
while others do not. In my opinion, I am firm that there is no problem with employing
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animals
to
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people’s
needs as long as they are not
being abused
.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. 25

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
321 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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