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A country becomes more interesting and develops more quickly when its population includes a mixture of nationalities. v.8

If the people of various nationalities will be available in a single country, it will have more ease to make progress. This essay agrees that various people population in a country helps a certain country to grow faster. People will be able to share each others ideas and will work together on various products and researches. I personally reckon that a country having people from outside the country will be really beneficial for the discovery of new things. The first main point is that a country will acquire people from outside a nation it will be fantastic due to the fact when two individuals have various ideas they will automatically exchange each other's thoughts to help each other. For example, my elder brother has problem in speaking English, then a new student from England came to his university and helped him to learn English and my brother taught him Urdu which rally helped the outsider student. The second main benefit is the working of various people on various projects and researchers. As we know that if a person with one idea will try to make a new thing he will always require a number of help with him to finish it consequently is a person from outside the country will help him he might invent something new. For example, when Japan opened the Honda company it didn't succeed much on the contrary when they did partnership with Pakistan they became one of the biggest brands in the world. To sum up, the two benefits of have various nationalities in a country their will be more sharing if ideas and more working of various items.
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personally
reckon that a
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having
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from outside the
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will be
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new
things. The
first
main point is that a
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will acquire
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people
from outside a nation it will be fantastic due to the fact when two individuals have
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various
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ideas
they will
automatically
exchange each other's thoughts to
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help
each other.
For example
, my elder brother has problem in speaking English, then a
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new
student from England came to his university and
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helped
him to learn English and my brother taught him Urdu which rally
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the outsider student.

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on
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projects and researchers. As we know that if a person with one
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will try to
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.
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, when Japan opened the Honda
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it didn't succeed much
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when they did partnership with Pakistan they became one of the biggest brands in the world.

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nationalities in a
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their will be more sharing if
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ideas
and more working of
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various
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IELTS essay A country becomes more interesting and develops more quickly when its population includes a mixture of nationalities.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
274 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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