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A company has announced that it wishes to build a large factory near your locality. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this new influence on your community. Do you support or oppose the factory establishment? v.1

A company has announced that it wishes to build a large factory near your locality. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this new influence on your community. Do you support or oppose the factory establishment? v. 1
I agree on that, so each company is announcing that it wishes to build a large factory near your locality. Because a lot job opportunity making of this. Company chief should be announced to a large factory to near a poor locality. Rather, people have taken a job. I agree, making a large factory near locality. Now, I am discussing to advantages about to this statement. This is the more advantages when company is announced to build a large factory near a locality. So, then a lot job opportunity is making to people. Often, when the factory is making in the area. So, often bring more job opportunity. In this area more job so jobless people are less and that area people happy. Other's area people are coming to this area for doing the job and country is developed. When people are doing the job so often such as country financially and economically better than another country. I think each company announced at least small factory are making of each locality. Now, I discuss to disadvantages about to this statement. This is the more disadvantages when company are open a factory of each locality. So, first disadvantages are that this cause of pollution in that area. Besides, this is the cause of more dangerous diseases are made for people. If that is the major disadvantage. That case is not making factory of each company in the near locality. If then the essence in making a factory so, then away from localities. So, this case of made secure from pollution in the area and job opportunity is also making. In concluding, this is the advantages and also disadvantages. So, companies should be factory making away from the locality. So then, this locality is saving for pollution and diseases. Rather, the government also should be that banned to making a factory within the locality.
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factory
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chief should
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large
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factory
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a poor locality.
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factory
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near
locality.

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company
is announced
to build a
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large
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factory
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near
a locality.
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job
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people
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factory
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economically
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each
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announced at least
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small
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are making of each locality.

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of each locality.
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In concluding, this is the advantages and
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disadvantages.
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,
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making away from the locality.
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, the
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government
also
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factory
within the locality.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
54Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay A company has announced that it wishes to build a large factory near your locality. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this new influence on your community. Do you support or oppose the factory establishment? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
312 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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