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A close friend is coming to visit you. S/he has asked you for advice for things to do in your hometown and the surrounding area. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: * Ask for more details about your friend's plans* Suggest some places to vis v.1

A close friend is coming to visit you. S/he has asked you for advice for things to do in your hometown and the surrounding area. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: * Ask for more details about your friend's plans* Suggest some places to vis v. 1
The number of people who prefer to live alone in many urban areas are getting increase recently. The main reason is because they want to be independent as they start a new life in the city. In my point of view, this trend could lead some drawbacks such as loneliness and depression. In current times, many people in the cities such as workers and college students feel more comfortable for living alone because they want to be independent. This could encourages individuals to overcome many problems by themselves so they will become stronger in the future. In Indonesia, for instance, students from rural areas who want to get a higher education have to move to the cities. Many of them prefer living in a single room rather than living in a shared house because they want to learn how to become independent. On the other hand, living alone may cause a loneliness, especially for someone that introvert. They might feel isolated and have no one to talk to. This could lead to a bigger problem such as depression. In the UK, more than 80% people who live alone suffer a loneliness and have higher risk to get a depression. This has become a serious problem that should be tackled by the society. In conclusion, people want to stay alone, mainly because they want to be independent. However, a loneliness could be the negative effect following this trend. So, people who live alone should be kept in touch with other people to avoid feeling lonely.
The number of
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prefer to
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live
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alone
in
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many
urban areas are getting increase recently. The main reason is
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because
they
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want
to be independent as they
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start
a new life in the city. In my point of view, this trend could lead
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some
drawbacks such as
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loneliness
and depression.

In
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current
times,
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many
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people
in the cities such as workers and college students feel more comfortable for
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living
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alone
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because
they
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want
to be independent. This could
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encourages
individuals to overcome
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many
problems by themselves
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so
they will become stronger in the future. In Indonesia,
for instance
, students from rural areas
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who
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want
to
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get
a higher education
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have to
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move
to the cities.
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of them prefer
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living
in a single room
rather
than
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living
in a shared
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house
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because
they
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want
to learn how to become independent.

On the other hand
,
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living
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alone
may cause a
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loneliness
,
especially
for someone that introvert. They might feel isolated and have no one to talk to. This could lead to a bigger problem such as depression. In the UK, more than 80%
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people
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who
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live
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alone
suffer a
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loneliness
and have higher
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risk
to
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get
a depression. This has become a serious problem that should
be tackled
by the society.

In conclusion
,
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people
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want
to stay
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alone
,
mainly
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because
they
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want
to be independent.
However
, a
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loneliness
could be the
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negative
effect following this trend.
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,
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people
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who
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live
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alone
should be
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kept
in touch with other
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people
to avoid feeling lonely.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay A close friend is coming to visit you. S/he has asked you for advice for things to do in your hometown and the surrounding area. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: * Ask for more details about your friend's plans* Suggest some places to vis v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
254 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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