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50. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Please explain youropinion. People should always tell the truth. v.1

50. Please explain youropinion. People should always tell the truth. v. 1
In this expeditiously transforming era, mobile phone has secured a tremendously pertinent position in our daily lives. Some people believe that this is an optimistic change while others consider it to be a pessimistic shift. I support the argument which considers it to be a positive one and would accentuate the same. To embark on the outlook which supports the argument, I consider that mobile phones have brought great convenience for all of us. Today, we are able to do a maximum of our daily routine work, which took a lot of time earlier, on a single swipe, like ordering vegetables, booking a cab and a lot more. Above all, I contemplate, communication as the biggest advantage, as it helps us stay in contact with our loved ones anytime and anywhere. To illustrate the issue of constant contact, girls travelling alone feel safer with mobile phones since they can reach out to their loved ones in case of emergency. To elucidate the compelling argument, I reckon that millennials today are extremely involved in their phones and as a result, they have lost the emotional connect with their surroundings. Apart from this, the proliferated use has made them sleep deprived as they keep exploring their device ceaselessly. Moreover, we observe an elevated number of accidents taking place as a result of negligence while using a mobile phone. To substantiate, consider the example of the contemporary trend of making dangerous and risky Tik Tok videos which have become a reason of death for a lot of teenagers. To summarize this, I would say that excess of anything is malicious. Mobile phone, a two edged sword, has advantages as well as disadvantages attached to it. On one hand it helps us to stay connected while on the other hand it might turn into a hideous monster if we dive too deep into its illusion of glory. Hence, considering all the aspects, I believe that advantages surely dominate the negative side.
In this
expeditiously
transforming era, mobile
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phone
has secured a
tremendously
pertinent position in our daily
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lives
.
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Some
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people
believe that this is an optimistic
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change
while others
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consider
it to be a pessimistic shift. I support the argument which
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considers
it to be a
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positive
one and would accentuate the same.

To embark on the outlook which supports the argument, I
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consider
that mobile
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phones
have brought great convenience for all of us.
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Today
, we are able to do a maximum of our daily routine work, which took
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a lot of
time earlier, on a single swipe, like ordering vegetables, booking a cab and a lot more.
Above all
, I contemplate, communication as the biggest advantage, as it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
us stay in contact with our
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loved
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ones
anytime and anywhere. To illustrate the issue of constant contact, girls travelling alone feel safer with mobile
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phones
since they can reach out to their
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loved
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ones
in case of emergency.

To elucidate the compelling argument, I reckon that millennials
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today
are
extremely
involved in their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
phones
and
as a result
, they have lost the emotional connect with their surroundings. Apart from this, the proliferated
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
has made them sleep deprived as they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
exploring their device
ceaselessly
.
Moreover
, we observe an elevated number of accidents taking place
as a result
of negligence while using a mobile
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phone
. To substantiate,
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consider
the example of the contemporary trend of making
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dangerous
and risky
Did you mean "TikTok" (= social networking app)?
Tik Tok
videos which have become a reason of death for
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a lot of
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teenagers
.

To summarize
this, I would say that excess of anything is malicious. Mobile
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phone
, a
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two edged
sword, has advantages
as well
as disadvantages attached to it. On one hand it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
us to stay connected while
on the other hand
it might turn into a hideous monster if we dive too deep into its illusion of glory.
Hence
, considering all the aspects, I believe that advantages
surely
dominate the
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negative
side.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
One who speaks only one language is one person, but one who speaks two languages is two people.
Turkish proverb

IELTS essay 50. Please explain youropinion. People should always tell the truth. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
327 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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