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TPO 2: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship between people. v.1

TPO 2: Always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship between people. v. 1
It is no longer news that life exists on other planets aside Earth. It is believed by some scientist that these entities may have a level of intellect and hence, they should be contacted. On the other hand, other scientist are of the view that contacting them is risky. This essay will discuss both views and express an opinion on the best cause of action for mankind. To begin, the idea of reaching out to other planets will help the human race understand her surroundings and neighbours better. Human beings will gain more knowledge about the activities of other entities in the universe and how their activities impact earthlings. In 1906 for example, a group of Astronauts speculated that entities existed on Mars and their activities were responsible for the worsening climatic conditions on earth. In 1956 however, another group of astronauts observed the activities on Mars and they were able to confirm the speculation of the earlier scientist. This discovery led to the formation of the best method for protecting people from the effect of activities if Mars residents. Meanwhile, communication with residents of other planet will automatically alert them of the existence of life on earth if they are not already aware of this. This could lead to serious attacks from aliens who are ever ready to destroy anything that is not like them. In 1965 for example, some aliens were said to have arrived in the US through the route a rocket was deployed to Venus attacking and hijacking equipments of people. In my opinion, I believe it is smarter not to communicate with other residents of the universe because it could lead to attacks from them and loss of lives. In 1907 for example, humans experienced an attack from unidentified flying objects after a drone was sent to Mars for exploration. This occurrence created panic and some lives were lost. In conclusion, while reaching out to aliens may provide insights on our environment, communicating with them may create an awareness of mankind; hence, leading to future attacks. In my opinion, no form of communication should
It is no longer news that life exists on
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other
planets aside Earth. It
is believed
by
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some
scientist that these entities may have a level of intellect and
hence
, they should
be contacted
. On the
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other
hand,
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other
scientist are of the view that contacting them is risky. This essay will discuss both views and express an opinion on the best cause of action for mankind.

To
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begin
, the
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idea
of reaching out to
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other
planets will
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help
the human race understand her surroundings and
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neighbours
better. Human beings will gain more knowledge about the
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activities
of
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other
entities in the universe and how their
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activities
impact earthlings. In 1906
for example
, a group of Astronauts speculated that entities existed on
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Mars
and their
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activities
were responsible for the worsening climatic conditions on earth. In 1956
however
, another group of astronauts observed the
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activities
on
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Mars and
they were able to confirm the speculation of the earlier scientist. This discovery led to the formation of the best method for protecting
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people
from the effect of
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activities
if
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Mars
residents.

Meanwhile, communication with residents of
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other
planet will
automatically
alert them of the existence of life on earth if they are not already aware of this. This could lead to serious
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attacks
from aliens who are ever ready to
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destroy
anything
that is
not like them. In 1965
for example
,
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some
aliens
were said
to have arrived in the US through the route a rocket
was deployed
to Venus attacking and hijacking equipments of
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people
.

In my opinion, I believe it is smarter not to communicate with
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other
residents of the universe
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because
it could lead to
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attacks
from them and loss of
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lives
.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
In
1907
for example
, humans experienced an
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attack
from unidentified flying objects after a drone was
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sent
to
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Mars
for exploration. This occurrence created panic and
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some
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lives
were lost
.

In conclusion
, while reaching out to aliens may provide insights on our environment, communicating with them may create an awareness of mankind;
hence
, leading to future
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attacks
. In my opinion, no form of communication
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should
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
If we spoke a different language, we would perceive a somewhat different world.
Ludwig Wittgenstein

IELTS essay TPO 2: Always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship between people. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
348 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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