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48. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is important for governments to protect wild animals and wilderness areas for the future generations. v.2

48. It is important for governments to protect wild animals and wilderness areas for the future generations. v. 2
When it comes to protection of wild animals and wilderness, controversy surrounds the issue of whether it is essential people are required to preserve wild animals and wilderness for tomorrow' s parents, and children or not. Some people are of the opinion that recent improvements in all various scientific fileds, such as providing a wide variety of GM food resources, have made us free from being concerned about the future issues. I believe, however, by facing quickly growing population, to avoid protecting both wild animals and wilderness will offer unsafe place for the future generation to live for some reasons. One of the most interesting aspects of the ongoing discussion which demands a keen contemplation is that the future' s populations need to benefit from all natural resources otherwise their life will be threatened. Today' s people are destroying all natural habitat through cutting down trees and other plants in order to construct roads, buildings, and factories, so that they can meet their basic needs. While, this uncontrolled deforestation have caused soild erosion and global warming which would be undeniable consequence of such today' s people' s behaviors. The future generation need fresh air to breath. This aim will not be gained unlesss we protect our green trees producing Oxygen and absorb Carbondioxide, which will hamper tomorrow' s generation from suffering from global warming. Moreover, if we protect natural habitat, the future generation will not experience starvation because of lack of low quality soil, as a consequence of todays' deforestation. Another noteworthy aspect of the current discussion which needs to be reflected is that wild animals play important roles in balancing food chain. There are many animals which rely on each other to keep the balance of the ecosystem. Now imaging we are poaching wild animals for our personal uses, how destructive effect will this performance have in the future? By invading their territories and illegally unting them, we will indirectly disturb the food web. Lets take an example of lions which feed on wolves. When we hunt them, the wolf populations will increase so that we will not control their populations, consequently the number of rabbits, deers and sheep, enabling the future generation to feed on them, will reduce. In this situation, how the future generation would tackle such problems? They will face such disturbance in ecological system which brings them nothing just facing lack of food and unsafety. To sum up, not only will preserving natural habitat and wild animals benefit people today, but it also will help tomorrow' s people to take advantages by having fresh atmosphere with mild temperature and, of course, by not facing lack of food because of disturbing food web.
When it
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comes
to protection of wild
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animals
and wilderness, controversy surrounds the issue of whether it is essential
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people
are required
to preserve wild
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animals
and wilderness for
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tomorrow&
#039; s parents, and children or not.
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Some
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people
are of the opinion that recent improvements in all various scientific
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fileds
, such as providing a wide variety of GM
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food
resources, have made us free from
being concerned
about the
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future
issues. I believe,
however
, by facing
quickly
growing
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population
, to avoid protecting both wild
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animals
and wilderness will offer unsafe place for the
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future
generation to
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live
for
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some
reasons.

One of the most interesting aspects of the ongoing discussion which demands a keen contemplation is that the
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future&
#039; s
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populations
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need
to benefit from all
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natural
resources
otherwise
their life will
be threatened
.
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Today&
#039; s
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people
are destroying all
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natural
habitat through cutting down trees and other plants in order to construct roads, buildings, and factories,
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so
that they can
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meet
their basic
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needs
. While, this uncontrolled deforestation have caused
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soild
erosion and global warming which would be undeniable consequence of such
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today&
#039; s
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people&
#039; s behaviors. The
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future
generation
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need
fresh air to breath. This aim will not
be gained
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unlesss
we protect our green trees producing Oxygen and absorb
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Carbondioxide
, which will hamper
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tomorrow&
#039; s generation from suffering from global warming.
Moreover
, if we protect
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natural
habitat, the
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future
generation will not experience starvation
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because
of lack of low quality soil, as a consequence of
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todays&
#039; deforestation.

Another noteworthy aspect of the
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current
discussion which
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needs
to
be reflected
is that wild
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animals
play
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important
roles in balancing
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food
chain. There are
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many
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animals
which rely on each other to
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keep
the balance of the ecosystem.
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Now
imaging we are poaching wild
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animals
for our personal
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uses
, how destructive effect will this performance have in the
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future
? By invading their territories and
illegally
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unting
them, we will
indirectly
disturb the
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food
web.
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Lets
take an example of lions which feed on wolves. When we hunt them, the wolf
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populations
will increase
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so
that we will not control their
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populations
,
consequently
the number of rabbits,
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deers
and sheep, enabling the
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future
generation to feed on them, will
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reduce
. In this situation, how the
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future
generation would tackle such problems? They will face such disturbance in ecological system which brings them nothing
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just
facing lack of
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food
and
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unsafety
.

To sum up, not
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only
will
The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: "preserve"
preserving
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natural
habitat and wild
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animals
benefit
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people
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today
,
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but
it
also
will
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help
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tomorrow&
#039; s
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people
to take advantages by having fresh atmosphere with mild temperature and,
of course
, by not facing lack of
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food
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because
of disturbing
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food
web.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
43Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
17Mistakes

IELTS essay 48. It is important for governments to protect wild animals and wilderness areas for the future generations. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
447 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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