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3. Think about a helpful classmate. Give three reasons to explain what featuresmake this person so helpful. v.1

3. Think about a helpful classmate. Give three reasons to explain what featuresmake this person so helpful. v. 1
The importance of the employees' look as compared to their performance is debatable. Every organization has its standards. Some focus on the physical appearance of their employees while others value the efforts more. This essay will discuss both sides of the argument in detail and provide evidence as to why the quality of work matters more than the dress for an employee. To begin with, the way we dress up does play a vital role in setting up the environment. Others usually judge his appearance. For instance, if someone dressed up in shabby clothes, come for the presentation, most audiences might not even listen to his speech due to his poor dress sense. Secondly, I have seen and observed a lot of people still remember the first impression I made on them. Therefore, it might not be wrong with some companies by emphasizing more on the appearance along with the required tasks. On the contrary, many believe that his talents recognize a person, not by his appearance. A well talented and knowledgeable person will make himself prominent in the crowd by his delivery of wisdom, ideas and the way he/she handles his work. For example, Gandhi always wore a simple piece of cloth rolled up around his body, but he managed to get his people freedom from British rule. It might not be wrong to say that action speaks louder than mere wardrobe. In my opinion, if I am good at my work, I give my hundred percent and always strive for excellence, then the way I dress-up does not matter at all. I have observed plenty of co-workers who are making progress in their professional lives because of their handwork and commitment. At the end of the day, it does not matter how you look or what you wear. I believe excellence makes you unique and different from the crowd. To summarise, it can be said that a person's knowledge, talent will always pay back, whereas the appearance might fade with time. It might give you an edge for a while, but in the long run, it is your efforts that will make you a valuable employee.
The importance of the employees' look as compared to their performance is debatable. Every organization has its standards.
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Some
focus on the physical
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appearance
of their employees while others value the efforts more. This essay will discuss both sides of the argument in detail and provide evidence as to why the quality of work matters more than the dress for an employee.

To
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begin
with, the way we dress up does play a vital role in setting up the environment. Others
usually
judge his
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appearance
.
For instance
, if someone dressed up in shabby clothes,
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come
for the presentation, most audiences
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might
not even listen to his speech due to his poor dress sense.
Secondly
, I have
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seen
and observed
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a lot of
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people
still
remember the
first
impression I made on them.
Therefore
, it
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might
not be
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wrong
with
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some
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companies
by emphasizing more on the
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appearance
along with the required tasks.

On the contrary
,
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many
believe that his talents recognize a person, not by his
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appearance
. A well talented and knowledgeable person will
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make
himself prominent in the crowd by his delivery of wisdom,
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ideas
and the way he/she
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handles
his work.
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, Gandhi always wore a simple piece of cloth rolled up around his body,
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but
he managed to
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get
his
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people
freedom from British
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rule
. It
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might
not be
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wrong
to say that action speaks louder than mere wardrobe.

In my opinion, if I am
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good
at my work, I give my hundred percent and always strive for excellence, then the way I dress-up does not matter at all. I have observed
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plenty
of co-workers who are making progress in their professional
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lives
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because
of their handwork and commitment. At the
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end
of the day, it does not matter how you look or what you wear. I believe excellence
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makes
you unique and
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different
from the crowd.

To
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summarise
, it can
be said
that a person's knowledge, talent will always pay back, whereas the
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appearance
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might
fade with time. It
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might
give you an edge for a while,
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but
in the long run, it is your efforts that will
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make
you a valuable employee.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay 3. Think about a helpful classmate. Give three reasons to explain what featuresmake this person so helpful. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
358 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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