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3. In general, people are living longer now. Which of the following do you think is the main cause of this phenomenon? •Technological improvements•Changes to education systems•improvements to our diets v.1

3. In general, people are living longer now. Which of the following do you think is the main cause of this phenomenon? •Technological improvements•Changes to education systems•improvements to our diets v. 1
The number of traffic accidents has increased in the past couple of years. It is often argued that stricter punishments are the solution, whilst others believe alternate measures would ensure road safety. In this essay, we will discuss both sides of the argument and provide evidence for why stricter punishments should be implemented for such offences. The increased severity of punishment for driving offences would compel people to think twice before driving roughly. By imposing higher fines or even cancelling their license, the general public would take a stronger stance towards road safety. For instance, since everyone will not have the means to pay such expensive fines, people would consider driving with care. However, many believe that alternate measures would prove to be effective in improving road safety. This essay disagrees as It is crucial for the punishment to have a direct effect on people’s mindset. If the government were to launch road safety campaign or even hold safety workshop, it is easy for people to just ignore such promotions and continue driving roughly. For instance, billboards and posters may miss the public eye, but the fear or losing their hard-earned money will not. In conclusion, while other measures such as campaigns and workshops may be implemented to promote safety. It is highly possible for the general public to remain unaffected by such promotions. The most effective way to reduce driving offences would be to impose stricter punishments such as high penalties which would compel people to consider driving safely to ensure minimum offences.
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argued that stricter
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punishments
are the solution, whilst others believe alternate measures would ensure
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road
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safety
. In this essay, we will discuss both sides of the argument and provide evidence for why stricter
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.

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driving
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offences
would compel
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twice
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before
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driving
roughly. By imposing higher fines or even cancelling their license, the
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general public
would take a stronger stance towards
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road
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safety
.
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, since everyone will not have the means to pay such expensive fines,
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people
would consider
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driving
with care.

However
,
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many
believe that alternate measures would prove to be effective in improving
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road
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safety
. This essay disagrees as It is crucial for the
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punishment
to have a direct effect on
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people’s
mindset. If the
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government
were to launch
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road
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safety
campaign or even hold
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safety
workshop, it is easy for
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people
to
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ignore
such promotions and continue
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driving
roughly.
For instance
, billboards and posters may miss the public eye,
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but
the fear or losing their
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hard
-earned money will not.

In conclusion
, while other measures such as campaigns and workshops may
be implemented
to promote
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safety
. It is
highly
possible for the
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general public
to remain unaffected by such promotions. The most effective way to
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reduce
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driving
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offences
would be to impose stricter
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punishments
such as high penalties which would compel
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people
to consider
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driving
safely
to ensure minimum
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offences
.
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IELTS essay 3. In general, people are living longer now. Which of the following do you think is the main cause of this phenomenon? •Technological improvements•Changes to education systems•improvements to our diets v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
254 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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