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3. Have you got any sisters or brothers

3. Have you got any sisters or brothers L9rP1
I have two sisters. I am the youngest child in the family, so I am loved by both sisters. The eldest sister is a beautiful, kind, and golden-hearted person. She always gives me a lot of useful recommendations and helps me take over many difficulties. Currently, she is an official in the district and she has been married for a few months. My second sister is equally beautiful. She is an accountant at a mid-range company in Can Tho city. She is a funny person, very friendly and open. That's why she is loved by everyone around her. So, I feel proud of them so much.
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. I am the youngest child in the family,
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I am
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sisters
. The eldest
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is a
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beautiful
, kind, and golden-hearted person. She always gives me
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a lot of
useful recommendations and
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helps
me take over
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many
difficulties.
Currently
, she is an official in the
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district and
she has
been married
for a few months. My second
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sister
is
equally
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beautiful
. She is an accountant at a mid-range
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company
in Can Tho city. She is a
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funny
person,
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very
friendly and open. That's why she is
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loved
by everyone around her.
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, I feel proud of them
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IELTS essay 3. Have you got any sisters or brothers

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  American English
1 paragraphs
106 words
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