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27. Some students prefer lectures where the teacher does all of the talking. Other students prefer classes where students are more interactive andcontribute to the lesson. Which do you prefer? v.1

27. Some students prefer lectures where the teacher does all of the talking. Other students prefer classes where students are more interactive andcontribute to the lesson. Which do you prefer? v. 1
BASED ON PREVIOUS YEAR SURVEY, IT SEEMS THAT PEOPLE FROM ARTS FIELD LIKE FIML CELEBRITIES, SINGERS, DANCERS ETC GOT HIGH STIPEND. IN CONTRAST, MAIN STREAM PROFESSIONALS SUCH AS DOCTORS, NURSES, TEACHER WHO ARE HELPING PEOPLE IN VARIOUS ASPECT OF THEIR LIFE ARE GETTING TINY WAGE FOR THEIR WORK. WHAT I THINK IS THA, THAT STORTS AND OTHER PERSONALITIES ARE WORTH OF GETTING HIGE WAGES BUT ALSO IT IS UNFAIR TO RESPECTABLE PROFESSIONALS LIKE DOCTORS AND NURSES TO GET LESSER PAYCHEQUE. THIS ESSAY WILL DISCUSSE ABOUT WHY I THINK THAT ARTS PEOPLE ARE DESERVE TO GET HIGHER PAY AND HOW IT IS UNFAIR TO THE ADMIRABLE PEOPLE. TO START WITH, DUE TO VARIOUS REASONS WHY THEY EARN MORE THAN ANY OTHERS. FIRSTLY, BECAUSE OF THE HARD WORK THEY DO FOR THE PUBLIC SATISFACTION. TO EXPLAIN, AFTER BECOMIG FAMOUS, PUBLIC DEMANDS BEST PERFORMANCE FROM THEM AND TO GIVE THAT THEY ALSO WORK VERY HARD. AS A RESULT, IN THE FEAR OF LOSSING PUBLIC INTEREST, THEIR AUTHORITY OFFERS THEM MORE MONEY. FOR AN EXAMPLE THE FAMOUS TV SHOW TARAK MEHTA IN INDIA, WHERE THE KNOW CHARACTOR WAS ON SRIKE AS THEIR DORECTOR WAS NOT GIVING HER ENOUGH COMPENSATION AS PER THE PUBLIC REVIEW. SO SHE QUITE THE SHOW UNTILL DIRECTOR AGREES. ONCE HE STATED THAT HE IS READY TO PAY AS MUCH AS SHE WANTS, SHE CAME BACK TO SHOW. HOWEVER, THIS SHOULD NOT HAPPEN BECAUSE THEY ARE JUST MAKING OUR LIFE BIT EASY BUT NOT EVERYONE USES THIS TO FRESHEN UP. IN THE OPPOSITE SIDE, I HAVE NUMEROUS CRUCIAL REASONS TO SAYS THAT IT IS NOT FAIR TO GET FRICTION AMOUNT OF REQUITAL FOR ORDINARY PROFESSIONAL. THE PRIME REASON IS THAT THEY HAD STRUGLED A LOT TO GET DEGREE AND CERTIFIED WITH THE LICENSE. IN EXPLANATION TO THIS, DURING THEIR STUDY THEY INVESTED A HUGE AMOUNT OF MONEY AND EVEN WORKED HARD FOR THE SUCCESS. THUS THEY SHOULD GET AT LEAST ENOUGH PAYMENT TO COMPANSATE. MOREOVER, THEY DOING A WORK IN RISKY ENVIRONMNET. IN BRIEF, THEY ARE WORKING WITH THE PEOPLE WHO HAVE SERIOUS DISEASES OR WHO ARE CHILDREN. SO WITH THIS WORK THEY ARE TAKING CHANCE OF THEIR OWN LIFE TOO. THUS I BELIEVE THEY IT IS TOTALLY WORTHY O PAY THEM HIGER SALARIES. FOR AN INSTANCE NURSES USED TO WORK WITH MANY PEOPLE LIKE AGED, SMALL CHILDREN, THIS PEOPLE USED TO HAVE SOME TYPE OF ILLNESS LIKE MENATLY RETARDER OR CONTGIOUS DISEASE LIKE TUBERCULOSIS ETC. WHICH ARE INFECTED ILLNESS BUT STILL THEY ARE DOING THEIR JOB WITH THEM. TO SUM UP, AFTER DISCUSING BOTH THE POINTS I THINK EVERY FIELD OR PERSONALITIES ARE WORTH OF GETTING GOOD REMITTANCE BASED ON THEIR DEDICATION AND DEVOTATION.
BASED ON PREVIOUS YEAR SURVEY, IT SEEMS THAT
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PEOPLE
FROM ARTS FIELD LIKE
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FIML
CELEBRITIES, SINGERS, DANCERS ETC
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GOT
HIGH STIPEND.
IN CONTRAST
, MAIN STREAM PROFESSIONALS SUCH AS DOCTORS, NURSES, TEACHER WHO ARE HELPING
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PEOPLE
IN VARIOUS ASPECT OF THEIR LIFE ARE GETTING TINY WAGE FOR THEIR
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WORK
. WHAT I
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THINK
IS THA, THAT
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STORTS
AND OTHER PERSONALITIES ARE WORTH OF GETTING
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HIGE
WAGES
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BUT
ALSO
IT IS UNFAIR TO RESPECTABLE PROFESSIONALS LIKE DOCTORS AND NURSES TO
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GET
LESSER
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PAYCHEQUE
. THIS ESSAY WILL
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DISCUSSE
ABOUT WHY I
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THINK
THAT ARTS
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PEOPLE
ARE DESERVE TO
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GET
HIGHER PAY AND HOW IT IS UNFAIR TO THE ADMIRABLE
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PEOPLE
.

TO
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START
WITH, DUE TO VARIOUS REASONS WHY THEY EARN MORE THAN ANY OTHERS.
FIRSTLY
,
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BECAUSE
OF THE
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HARD
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WORK
THEY DO FOR THE
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PUBLIC
SATISFACTION. TO
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EXPLAIN
, AFTER
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BECOMIG
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FAMOUS
,
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PUBLIC
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DEMANDS BEST
PERFORMANCE FROM THEM AND TO GIVE THAT THEY
ALSO
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WORK
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VERY
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HARD
.
AS A RESULT
, IN THE FEAR OF
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LOSSING
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PUBLIC
INTEREST, THEIR AUTHORITY OFFERS THEM MORE MONEY. FOR AN EXAMPLE THE
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FAMOUS
TV
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SHOW
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TARAK
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MEHTA
IN INDIA, WHERE THE KNOW
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CHARACTOR
WAS ON
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SRIKE
AS THEIR
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DORECTOR
WAS NOT GIVING HER
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ENOUGH
COMPENSATION AS PER THE
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PUBLIC
REVIEW.
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SO
SHE QUITE THE
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SHOW
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UNTILL
DIRECTOR
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AGREES
. ONCE HE STATED THAT HE IS READY TO PAY AS MUCH AS SHE WANTS, SHE CAME BACK TO
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SHOW
.
HOWEVER
, THIS SHOULD NOT HAPPEN
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BECAUSE
THEY ARE
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JUST
MAKING OUR LIFE BIT EASY
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BUT
NOT EVERYONE
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USES
THIS TO FRESHEN UP.

IN THE OPPOSITE SIDE, I HAVE NUMEROUS CRUCIAL REASONS TO SAYS THAT IT IS NOT
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FAIR
TO
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GET
FRICTION AMOUNT OF REQUITAL FOR ORDINARY PROFESSIONAL. THE PRIME REASON IS THAT THEY HAD
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STRUGLED
A LOT TO
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GET
DEGREE AND CERTIFIED WITH THE LICENSE. IN EXPLANATION TO THIS, DURING THEIR STUDY THEY INVESTED A HUGE AMOUNT OF MONEY AND EVEN WORKED
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HARD
FOR THE SUCCESS.
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THUS
THEY SHOULD
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GET
AT LEAST
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ENOUGH
PAYMENT TO
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COMPANSATE
.
MOREOVER
,
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THEY DOING
A
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WORK
IN RISKY
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ENVIRONMNET
.
IN BRIEF
, THEY ARE WORKING WITH THE
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PEOPLE
WHO HAVE SERIOUS DISEASES OR WHO ARE CHILDREN.
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SO
WITH THIS
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WORK
THEY ARE TAKING CHANCE OF THEIR
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OWN
LIFE TOO.
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THUS
I BELIEVE THEY IT IS
TOTALLY
WORTHY O PAY THEM
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HIGER
SALARIES. FOR AN INSTANCE NURSES
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USED
TO
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WORK
WITH
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MANY
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PEOPLE
LIKE AGED,
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SMALL
CHILDREN, THIS
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PEOPLE
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USED
TO HAVE
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SOME
TYPE OF ILLNESS LIKE
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MENATLY
RETARDER OR
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CONTGIOUS
DISEASE LIKE TUBERCULOSIS ETC. WHICH
ARE INFECTED
ILLNESS
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BUT
STILL
THEY ARE DOING THEIR JOB WITH THEM.

TO SUM UP, AFTER
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DISCUSING
BOTH THE POINTS I
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THINK
EVERY FIELD OR PERSONALITIES ARE WORTH OF GETTING
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GOOD
REMITTANCE BASED ON THEIR DEDICATION AND
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DEVOTATION
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay 27. Some students prefer lectures where the teacher does all of the talking. Other students prefer classes where students are more interactive andcontribute to the lesson. Which do you prefer? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
444 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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