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22. Successful sports professional can earn a great deal of money than people in other important profession. Some people think it is fully justify. Other think it is unfair. Discuss both views. Give your own opinion. Include relevant example from your own knowledge. v.7

It is argued, that athletes have more revenue than other professionals like Politicians, Doctors, Engineers, Artists etc. Many say it is fair to get and others argue that’s not worthy. I provide my reasons, for agreeing with the it. A lot of sports professionals get huge income all because of there hard-work in there early days. As they expel with abundant talent they got success in there careers and enjoy the fruit of that now by making money. For example, Cricketer Virat Kohli is renowned for his skillset in playing the match effectively and making high probability of win, that is what make them take high remunerations and by this he was given chances for promotions to various brands which made his income grow rapidly. As well, they are sold for crores of rupees for leagues in auctions. This is not supported by some members in the society. Firstly, they say cricket associations not to give high salaries and also argue there are many soldiers who serve countries are supposed to get all the wealth and reputation than that of sports professionals. For Instance, being ambassador for many brands which relates to bettings for example, MPL, Rummy Circle and so on they make there sources of income, these are misleading youth which is a great impact on there career as they follow them being a fan. I conclude, that any sportsman have very less career as his or her retirement age is low they are supposed to earn during the period possible.
It
is argued
, that athletes have more revenue than other professionals like Politicians, Doctors, Engineers, Artists etc.
Many
say it is
fair
to
get
and others
argue that’s not worthy. I provide my reasons, for agreeing with
the it
.
A lot of
sports professionals
get
huge income all
because
of there
hard
-work in
there
early days. As they expel with abundant talent they
got
success in
there
careers and enjoy the fruit of that
now
by making money.
For example
, Cricketer
Virat
Kohli
is renowned
for his
skillset
in playing the match
effectively
and making high probability of win,
that is
what
make
them take high remunerations and by this he was
given
chances for promotions to various brands which made his income grow
rapidly
.
As well
, they
are sold
for crores of rupees for leagues in auctions.

This is not supported by
some
members in the society.
Firstly
, they say cricket associations not to give high salaries and
also
argue there are
many
soldiers who serve countries
are supposed
to
get
all the wealth and reputation than that of sports professionals.
For Instance
, being ambassador for
many
brands which relates to
bettings
for example
, MPL, Rummy Circle and
so
on they
make
there sources of income, these are misleading youth which is a great impact on there career as they follow them being a fan. I conclude, that any sportsman have
very
less career as
his or her
retirement age is low they
are supposed
to earn during the period possible.
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IELTS essay Successful sports professional can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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