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2076 first describe one of your neighbourswhen did you become neighborsdo you often meetstate whether your neighbor is a good one v.1

2076 first describe one of your neighbourswhen did you become neighborsdo you often meetstate whether your neighbor is a good one v. 1
It would not be an injustice to say that in the past times, women were dominated in the society. However, nowadays, males and females are given equal opportunities in the work-field. From my perspective, it is a positive development, and my views associated with this would be hashed out in the upcoming paragraphs. To begin with, first and foremost clear benefit is that females can give better performance in some sectors like cosmetic products, salons, stitching and many more because they have more knowledge in these realms in comparison with males. Secondly, to make an exquisite balance in work-field, so that both genders can attain equal respect, as well as discrimination level would be diminished. Thirdly, it is not only beneficial for firms, but also for the society as well. On the flip side of the coin, fixed quota for women may be unfair for men as some more qualified and well skilled men can be rejected owing to this reservation. Even though companies like to provide equal opportunities for jobs to both genders, discrimination can be in another way like underpaying the women at the same post as men. Aside from this, the society had better be egalitarian, where all are the considered equal. Last but not least, it has been proven significantly that women have less stamina to do any work as compared to men, thus it can affect the economy of any organization. To sum up, having elaborated above viewpoints, it can be concluded that offering an equal number of jobs to both men and women is a positive development as is well said that man is the head of the family, the woman is the neck that turns the head.
It would not be an injustice to say that in the past times,
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women
were dominated
in the society.
However
, nowadays, males and females are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
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equal
opportunities in the work-field. From my perspective, it is a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
development, and my views associated with this would
be hashed
out in the upcoming paragraphs.

To
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begin
with,
first
and foremost
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clear
benefit is that females can give better performance in
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some
sectors like cosmetic products, salons, stitching and
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many
more
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because
they have more knowledge in these realms
in comparison
with males.
Secondly
, to
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make
an exquisite balance in work-field,
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so
that both genders can attain
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equal
respect,
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as well as
discrimination level would
be diminished
.
Thirdly
, it is not
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only
beneficial for firms,
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but
also
for the society
as well
.

On the flip side of the coin,
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fixed
quota for
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women
may be unfair for
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men
as
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some
more qualified and well skilled
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men
can
be rejected
owing to this reservation.
Even though
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companies
like to provide
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equal
opportunities for jobs to both genders, discrimination can be in another way like underpaying the
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women
at the same post as
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men
. Aside from this, the society had better be egalitarian, where all are the considered
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equal
. Last
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but
not least, it has
been proven
significantly
that
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women
have less stamina to do any work as compared to
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men
,
thus
it can affect the economy of any organization.

To sum up, having elaborated above viewpoints, it can
be concluded
that offering an
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equal
number of jobs to both
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men
and
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women
is a
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positive
development as is well said that
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man
is the head of the family, the woman is the neck that turns the head.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay 2076 first describe one of your neighbourswhen did you become neighborsdo you often meetstate whether your neighbor is a good one v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
284 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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