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2063 Describe a film or TV show that made you laugh a lot. You should say: What it wasWhen it happenedWho was with youAnd explain why you laughed/ why you still remember this event v.1

2063 Describe a film or TV show that made you laugh a lot. You should say: What it wasWhen it happenedWho was with youAnd explain why you laughed/ why you still remember this event v. 1
Happiness is the key to have a good life. It affects us and our body in many ways. It is hard to project what is happiness many categories affect our lives. To improve it many changes must be made, which varies from a different person, and this is the reason why we fail to describe it. Firstly, to have a good life three things should be in place mind, body and money. Having lots of money, which do not mean more joy, but it must be balanced. To illustrate, if a person has more than enough money, cars or properties, but nothing to share with it, neither friend or family, then there are more chances that he will be not satisfied in his life. To fix this, he must have a good social life and relationship with others, and by doing this it will lead to better mental health, also make a person's mood better. Secondly, fortune cannot buy great health. To make the experience better good physical health is necessary. To feel less stressed we should fix external and internal health. If any individual does body and mental workout, then it can be fixable. To do that, they should perform intensive training in a gym or yoga and meditation, then its quality will improve to a greater extent. As a result, we will be younger from inside to outside, and this is important to have the quality of living. In conclusion, to achieve happiness, our mental and physical health should be our main priority rather than wealth. Nowadays, it's lacking in an average person, and it can be solved by spending a few amounts of time with our bodies and close ones.
Happiness is the key to have a
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good
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life
. It affects us and our
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body
in
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many
ways. It is
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hard
to project what is happiness
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many
categories affect our
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lives
. To
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improve
it
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many
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changes
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must
be made
, which varies from a
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different
person, and this is the reason why we fail to
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describe
it.

Firstly
, to have a
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good
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life
three things should be in place mind,
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body
and money. Having lots of money, which do not mean more joy,
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but
it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be balanced
. To illustrate, if a person has more than
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enough
money, cars or properties,
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but
nothing to share with it, neither friend
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or
family, then there are more chances that he will be not satisfied in his
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life
. To
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fix
this, he
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must
have a
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good
social
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life
and relationship with others, and by doing this it will lead to better mental
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health
,
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
a person's mood better.

Secondly
, fortune cannot
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buy
great
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health
. To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
the experience better
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good
physical
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health
is necessary. To feel less
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stressed
we should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
fix
external and internal
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
health
. If any individual does
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
body
and mental workout, then it can be fixable. To do that, they should perform intensive training in a gym or yoga and meditation, then its quality will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
to a greater extent.
As a result
, we will be younger from inside to outside, and this is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
to have the quality of living.

In conclusion
, to achieve happiness, our mental and physical
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
health
should be our main priority
rather
than wealth. Nowadays, it's lacking in an average person, and it can
be solved
by spending a few amounts of time with our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bodies
and close ones.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay 2063 Describe a film or TV show that made you laugh a lot. You should say: What it wasWhen it happenedWho was with youAnd explain why you laughed/ why you still remember this event v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
283 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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