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2. Some people think that newspapers are the best way to learn news. However, others believe that they can learn news better through other media. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.1

2. Some people think that newspapers are the best way to learn news. However, others believe that they can learn news better through other media. v. 1
News keep us informed by reporting ongoing issues. Therefore, some people claim that newspapers are the best form of media, while others are sceptical about this statement and opine that news can be more effectively acquired from other media. Both parties have their reasonable points which I shall analyse in this essay, along with my own perspective. On the one hand, newspapers are highly appreciated thanks to its reliability. The first supportive reason is that newspapers are written by fully-trained journalists from prestigious publishers, as well as professionals from various fields. Therefore, it is irrefutable that news articles are of high authenticity and are usually highly academic. The second beneficial feature contributing to reliability is that it is imposed on strict censorship by the government or local authorities which is essential to control misleading or triggering information, especially with regard to politic issues. For example, trusty governmental newspapers have been reporting about COVID-19 pandemic, whose information is considered accurate, concise and neutral. On the other hand, various other forms of media such as websites, or social media have a merit of quick updating. Unlike traditional newspapers which takes a vast amount of time for editing, printing before it can reach the hands of its readers, the news on websites are updated second by second so it can readily transfer the information to clients instantaneously. Likewise, news on social media are also updated rapidly thanks to the contribution of a massive community all over the globe. However, there is a demerit that these different media may contain misleading news, which is rife among the Internet these days. To conclude, professional newspapers and journalists are more reliable, but the Internet is far faster in terms of updating. In my opinion, high authenticity is the most important factor, so the newspaper will continue to play a pivotal role to readers. Whereas, other media forms offer alternatives for those who prefer instant news.
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News
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keep
us informed by reporting ongoing issues.
Therefore
,
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some
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people
claim that
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newspapers
are the best form of
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media
, while others are
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sceptical
about this statement and opine that
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news
can be more
effectively
acquired from
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other
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media
. Both parties have their reasonable points which I shall
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analyse
in this essay, along with my
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own
perspective.

On the one hand,
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newspapers
are
highly
appreciated thanks to its reliability. The
first
supportive reason is that
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newspapers
are written
by
fully
-trained journalists from prestigious publishers,
as well
as professionals from various fields.
Therefore
, it is irrefutable that
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news
articles are of high authenticity and are
usually
highly
academic. The second beneficial feature contributing to reliability is that it
is imposed
on strict censorship by the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
or local authorities which is essential to control misleading or triggering information,
especially
with regard to politic issues.
For example
, trusty governmental
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newspapers
have been reporting about COVID-19 pandemic, whose information
is considered
accurate, concise and neutral.

On the
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other
hand, various
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other
forms of
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media
such as websites, or social
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media
have a merit of quick updating. Unlike traditional
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newspapers
which takes a vast amount of time for editing, printing
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before
it can reach the hands of its readers, the
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news
on websites
are updated
second by second
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so
it can
readily
transfer the information to clients
instantaneously
.
Likewise
,
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news
on social
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media
are
also
updated
rapidly
thanks to the contribution of a massive community all over the globe.
However
, there is a demerit that these
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different
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media
may contain misleading
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news
, which is rife among the Internet these days.

To conclude
, professional
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newspapers
and journalists are more reliable,
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but
the Internet is far faster in terms of updating. In my opinion, high authenticity is the most
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important
factor,
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so
the
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newspaper
will continue to play a pivotal role to readers. Whereas,
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other
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media
forms offer alternatives for those who prefer instant
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news
.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay 2. Some people think that newspapers are the best way to learn news. However, others believe that they can learn news better through other media. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
319 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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Lexical Resource: 8.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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