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Some people think that newspapers are the best way to learn news. However, others believe that they can learn news better through other media. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.3

Some people think that newspapers are the best way to learn news. However, others believe that they can learn news better through other media. v. 3
In the past, people used to acquire news from newspapers. However, thanks to modern technology, we have more ways to receive information nowadays. Many people prefer 'modern' methods other than newspaper, for example, social media, are better because they are updated more regularly. Most people read news from their phones rather than buying newspapers which are old-fashioned. I think different methods get informed have their own advantages and disadvantages, I will discuss this further in my essay. The newspaper is one of the greatest inventions throughout history because it revolutionized the way people received information. People began to understand what happened around the world via the publishing of newspapers. People started to know what was happening thousands miles away from their home. Some newspapers like The Times founded in the early 18th century still run today with average daily circulation of a tremendous number. Experienced and well-trained journalists are hired in order to produce news with the best quality. Also, high quality report can be a valuable resource for bankers and researchers. Those people usually provide consultations for the government to decide public policy and foreign affairs. At present, people have more and more alternatives. Newspapers seem to be outdated in our daily life. We have internet. We have cell phones. In this era, everyone could be a journalist. Hurray! We don't have to waste a lot of time to wait for editing and printing newspapers. It is much more efficient. Many citizen journalists post their videos and their reports on social media. However, they are usually a lot of fake news which may mislead people. For example, when the tsunami hit Japan in 2012, there was a rumour in the internet which leads to pressure purchase of sea salt. To sum up, the newspaper is generally considered as a resource that can be trusted. However, the internet is much more efficient.
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people
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used
to acquire
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news
from
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newspapers
.
However
, thanks to modern technology, we have more ways to receive information nowadays.
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Many
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people
prefer 'modern' methods other than
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newspaper
,
for example
, social media, are better
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because
they
are updated
more
regularly
. Most
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people
read
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news
from their phones
rather
than buying
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newspapers
which are
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old
-fashioned. I
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think
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different
methods
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get
informed have their
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own
advantages and disadvantages, I will discuss this
further
in my essay.

The
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newspaper
is one of the greatest inventions throughout history
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because
it revolutionized the way
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people
received information.
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People
began to understand what happened around the world via the publishing of
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newspapers
.
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People
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started
to know what was happening thousands miles away from their home.
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Some
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newspapers
like The Times founded in the early 18th century
still
run
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today
with average daily circulation of a tremendous number. Experienced and well-trained journalists
are hired
in order to produce
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news
with the best quality.
Also
, high quality report can be a valuable resource for bankers and researchers. Those
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people
usually
provide consultations for the
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government
to decide public policy and foreign affairs.

At present,
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people
have more and more alternatives.
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Newspapers
seem to
be outdated
in our daily life. We have internet. We have cell phones. In this era, everyone could be a journalist. Hurray! We don't
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have to
waste
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a lot of
time to wait for editing and printing
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newspapers
. It is much more efficient.
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Many
citizen journalists post their videos and their reports on social media.
However
, they are
usually
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a lot of
fake
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news
which may mislead
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people
.
For example
, when the tsunami hit Japan in 2012, there was a
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rumour
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in the internet
which leads to pressure
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purchase
of sea salt.

To sum up, the
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newspaper
is
generally
considered as a resource that can
be trusted
.
However
, the internet is much more efficient.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
He who knows no foreign languages know nothing of his own.
Johann Wolfgang von Goethe

IELTS essay Some people think that newspapers are the best way to learn news. However, others believe that they can learn news better through other media. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
312 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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