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2- Plastic shopping bags contribute to the pollution of land and sea, some think they should be banned. Do you agree or disagree? v.1

2- Plastic shopping bags contribute to the pollution of land and sea, some think they should be banned. v. 1
Although plastic bags are deemed to be convenient to shopping, its waste has a detrimental effect on the fauna of land and sea. Some activists think that governments should prohibit them entirely. I completely agree with their opinion, but educating the public and introducing other alternatives should be considered first. It is undeniable that plastics have caused an immense litter problem. Firstly, land drains into the oceans has formed what is known as the Great Pacific Garbage Patch, which is estimated by the size of a continent of plastic rubbish. In addition, blockage of drainage systems is mostly related to plastics as it happens in Bangladesh. Furthermore, the extinction of whales and turtles is due to foraging for plastic flotsam. This is because indigestible shards of plastics fester inside their stomach causing death. As a consequence, plastic bags are regarded as a salient source of pollution. Governments should take some viable steps to mitigate wastage. Some introduced safety net to collect plastics lest blocking the pipes nor polluting the water. Raising awareness campaigns to disseminate information over the implication of plastic bags on the environment. Moreover, encourage the public to cut down on using disposable bags by introducing versatile reusable bags. Some stores as Aldie’s store chains in Europe are offering cashback credits for not using plastic bags. Finally, municipalities should help to recycle by distributing recycle bins for plastics. Thus, if governments and citizens implemented the concept of ” reuse, reduce, and recycle ”, the swift deterioration in animal life and the environment would be impeded. In conclusion, I would argue that plastic bags litters pose a threat to the environment. If authorities teach the public to deter them using plastics and spur them to recycle, swift outcomes would be reaped.
Although
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plastic
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bags
are deemed
to be convenient to shopping, its waste has a detrimental effect on the fauna of land and sea.
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Some
activists
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think
that
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governments
should prohibit them
entirely
. I completely
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agree
with their opinion,
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but
educating the public and introducing other alternatives should
be considered
first
.

It is undeniable that
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plastics
have caused an immense litter problem.
Firstly
, land drains into the oceans has formed what
is known
as the Great Pacific Garbage Patch, which
is estimated
by the size of a continent of
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plastic
rubbish.
In addition
, blockage of drainage systems is
mostly
related to
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plastics
as it happens in Bangladesh.
Furthermore
, the extinction of whales and turtles is due to foraging for
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plastic
flotsam. This is
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because
indigestible shards of
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plastics
fester inside their stomach causing death. As a consequence,
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plastic
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bags
are regarded
as a salient source of pollution.

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Governments
should take
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some
viable steps to mitigate wastage.
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Some
introduced safety net to collect
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plastics
lest blocking the pipes nor polluting the water. Raising awareness campaigns to disseminate information over the implication of
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plastic
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bags
on the environment.
Moreover
, encourage the public to
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cut
down on using disposable
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bags
by introducing versatile reusable
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bags
.
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Some
stores as
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Aldie
’s store chains in Europe are offering cashback credits for not using
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plastic
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bags
.
Finally
, municipalities should
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help
to
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recycle
by distributing
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recycle
bins for
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plastics
.
Thus
, if
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governments
and citizens implemented the concept of
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”
reuse,
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reduce
, and
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recycle
”, the swift deterioration in animal life and the environment would
be impeded
.

In conclusion
, I would argue that
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plastic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bags
litters pose a threat to the environment. If authorities teach the public to deter them using
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
plastics
and spur them to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
recycle
, swift outcomes would
be reaped
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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IELTS essay 2- Plastic shopping bags contribute to the pollution of land and sea, some think they should be banned. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
292 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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Task Achievement: 8.0
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