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2. Is your country a safe country?

2. Is your country a safe country? eweMA
I firmly believe that my country is safe. Because there are many reasons. First of all, security is always strictly regulated and implemented. So everyone's safety is always guaranteed. In addition, the dangers or the cases are quickly solved by the police or the protection agencies. Moreover, the crime rate in my country is decreasing day by day because the line of protection and crime arrest is too strict. Overall, Vietnam is a very safe country to live in.
I
firmly
believe that my country is safe.
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Because
there are
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many
reasons.
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First of all
, security is always
strictly
regulated and implemented.
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So
everyone's safety is always guaranteed.
In addition
, the
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dangers
or the cases are
quickly
solved by the police or the protection agencies.
Moreover
, the crime rate in my country is decreasing day by day
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because
the line of protection and crime arrest is too strict.
Overall
, Vietnam is a
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very
safe country to
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live
in.
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IELTS essay 2. Is your country a safe country?

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
79 words
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