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1.The advantages and disadvantages of studying oline

1. The advantages and disadvantages of studying oline AgpYe
These days, we can not deny that popoularity of the Internet in learning especially during Covid 19 pandemic. However, everything has a positive side and nagative side, and so does online learning. At first, beacause we are in social – distancing time so we have to stay at home. To learn new knowledge, teachers have decided to open online classes though many apps so we will still gain knowledge but don’t need to go to school Secondly, the mood will be more comfortable because we can exercise our mind without the daily grind of getting to school on time, fighting through traffic, even pushing through illness so as not to miss a class Thirdly, we can study anywhere, anytime with smartphone and laptop if we want. When we don’t understand something, just look up the Internet. There are many easy answers for us to understand. There are even apps for students to exchange difficult questions with each other. It both understand the question and develop the communication. Besides the benefits of reading, we still have the disadvantages First of all, some students who don’t have good condition to study. It is also a big obstacle for them when they don’t have much of means to gain a lot of knowledge and they have to try catch up with their friends when go back to school In addition, it is hard for teachers to get all of students to focus on the lecture during the online learning Students can do their own things during hours that it is hard for teachers to manage, which makes others feel uncomfortable. Lastly, studying oline has some limited such as students can not meet each other so we will get bored of being at home for a long time. We can only text our friends without meeting them in person. It is not natural and gradually no longer talking to each other. Anyways, online manner of education has both advantages and disadvantages. For me, we should find out the best way about leaning online to have the best quality.
These days, we can not deny that
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popoularity
of the Internet in learning
especially
during
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Covid 19
pandemic.
However
, everything has a
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positive
side and
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nagative
side, and
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so
does
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online
learning.

At
first
,
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beacause
we are in social
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–
distancing time
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so
we
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have to
stay at home. To learn new knowledge, teachers have decided to open
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online
classes though
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many
apps
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so
we will
still
gain knowledge
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but
don’t need to go to
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school


Secondly
, the mood will be more comfortable
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because
we can exercise our mind without the daily grind of getting to school on time, fighting through traffic, even pushing through illness
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so
as not to miss a
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class


Thirdly
, we can study anywhere, anytime with smartphone and laptop if we want. When we don’t understand something,
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just
look up the Internet. There are
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many
easy answers for us to understand. There are even apps for
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students
to exchange difficult questions with each other. It both understand the question and develop the communication.

Besides
the benefits of reading, we
still
have the disadvantages

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First of all
,
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some
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students
who don’t have
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good
condition to study. It is
also
a
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big
obstacle for them when they don’t have much of means to gain
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a lot of
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knowledge and
they
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have to
try catch up with their friends when go back to
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school


In addition
, it is
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hard
for teachers to
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get
all of
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students
to focus on the lecture during the
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online
learning
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Students
can do their
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own
things during hours that it is
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hard
for teachers to manage, which
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makes
others feel uncomfortable.

Lastly
, studying
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oline
has
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some
limited such as
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students
can not
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meet
each other
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so
we will
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get
In standard English it's more accepted to use "bored with" or "bored by".
bored of
being at home for a long time. We can
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only
text our friends without meeting them in person. It is not natural and
gradually
no longer talking to each other.

Anyways,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
manner of education has both advantages and disadvantages. For me, we should find out the best way about leaning
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
to have the best quality.
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IELTS essay 1. The advantages and disadvantages of studying oline

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  American English
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