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1. Some people say that tourism has many negative effects on the countries thats people travel to. How true is this statement? What can tourists do to reduce the harmful effects of tourism on local cultures and environments? v.1

1. Some people say that tourism has many negative effects on the countries thats people travel to. How true is this statement? What can tourists do to reduce the harmful effects of tourism on local cultures and environments? v. 1
Nowadays, tourism plays a vital role in the economic development of nations. Although local cultures and environments are indeed affected negatively for some reasons, there are still some solutions that tourists can take to minimize these damages. The serious environmental impacts of the tourism industry are undeniable. Firstly, trees and forests are destroyed to construct tourist accommodation such as resorts, hotels, which contributes to reducing pristine areas and deforestation. This can result in soil erosion, forest fire and even climate changes that is a global problem now. In addition, mass tourism destroys national and cultural identities under the appearance of foreign cultures. Visitors bring their own customs, traditions and especially languages to communicate and fall in line with the locals so residents will gradually learn their languages and copy their habits. Nevertheless, these harmful impacts can be reduced considerably by some actions taken by tourists. Travellers should preserve local and natural areas by complying with rules like not touching ancient monuments. This is because too many visitors try to touch relics for their misconception. Moreover, they should be aware of not leaving litter, especially not throwing garbage in natural or historical areas. This is a little thing that everyone can do but plays a crucial role in preserving local cultures and environments. In conclusion, it is important for people to immediately take actions together to preserve tourist attractions. And the best way to do this is to have a good sense.
Nowadays, tourism plays a vital role in the economic development of nations. Although
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local
cultures and environments are
indeed
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affected
negatively
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reasons, there are
still
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some
solutions that
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tourists
can take to minimize these damages.

The serious environmental impacts of the tourism industry are undeniable.
Firstly
, trees and forests are
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destroyed
to construct
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tourist
accommodation such as resorts, hotels, which contributes to reducing pristine areas and deforestation. This can result in soil erosion, forest fire and even climate
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changes
that is
a global problem
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now
.
In addition
, mass tourism
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destroys
national and cultural identities under the appearance of foreign cultures. Visitors bring their
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own
customs, traditions and
especially
languages to communicate and fall in line with the
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locals
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so
residents will
gradually
learn their languages and copy their habits.

Nevertheless
, these harmful impacts can be
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reduced
considerably
by
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some
actions taken by
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tourists
.
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Travellers
should preserve
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local
and natural areas by complying with
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rules
like not touching ancient monuments. This is
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because
too
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many
visitors try to touch relics for their misconception.
Moreover
, they should be aware of not leaving litter,
especially
not throwing garbage in natural or historical areas. This is a
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little
thing that everyone can do
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but
plays a crucial role in preserving
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local
cultures and environments.

In conclusion
, it is
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important
for
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people
to immediately take actions together to preserve
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tourist
attractions. And the best way to do this is to have a
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good
sense.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay 1. Some people say that tourism has many negative effects on the countries thats people travel to. How true is this statement? What can tourists do to reduce the harmful effects of tourism on local cultures and environments? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
241 words
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6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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