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1.Read the following extract, then write PEEL paragraph describing what are the differences between the merchant and Santiago character, after that refer to the dream theme and the symbolism of the desert. Not less than 150.

1. Read the following extract, then write PEEL paragraph describing what are the differences between the merchant and Santiago character, after that refer to the dream theme and the symbolism of the desert. Not less than 150. KVK79

First of all, The crystal merchant serves as an important friend to Santiago during Santiago’s time in Tangier, but he also functions as a cautionary case of someone who has become complacent and given up the pursuit of his Personal Legend. Moreover Santiago is An adventurous young Andalusian shepherd determined to fulfill his Personal Legend, which is to find a treasure at the foot of the Egyptian pyramids. He is the book's protagonist. While the merchant is A struggling merchant who owns a crystal shop on top of a desolate hill. His shop was once popular but lost much of its business as Tangier lost its status as Egypt’s premiere port town. He is a good-hearted, devout Muslim, but has a crippling fear of change.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".First
First of all
, The crystal merchant serves as an This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:vitalcriticalessential
important
 friend to Santiago during Santiago’s time in Tangier, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 he also
 functions as a cautionary case of someone who has become complacent and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :accorded
given
 up the pursuit of his Personal Legend. Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?Moreover,
Moreover
 Santiago is An adventurous young Andalusian shepherd determined to fulfill his Personal Legend, which is to find a treasure at the foot of the Egyptian pyramids. He is the book's protagonist.

“While” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
While
 the merchant is A struggling merchant who This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :possesses
owns
 a crystal shop on top of a desolate hill. His shop was once popular This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 lost much of its business as Tangier lost its status as Egypt’s premiere port town. He is a This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :beneficialproduct
good
-hearted, devout Muslim, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 has a crippling fear of This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :alteradjust
change
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