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1. Nowadays parents put too much pressure on their children to succeed. Is this a negative or positive development?

1. Nowadays parents put too much pressure on their children to succeed. Is this a negative or positive development? EJVr
In recent time, the pressure from parents is beyond the limit for better future and successful career for their children. Though there is positive impact for children as understand the value of study and afterwards achieve desirable salary and equipped with advance facilities. However, the main negative aspect is limitless of pressure make children stressful. To begin with, the main development on positive side would be that juvenile will have higher chances of finding proper and enough salaried job. Firstly, parents have life long experience and they have awareness about that why success matters in every stage of life. If the children will do best in academic then there are higher probability to find better job which has up to the mark salary package. As a result, one can purchase every type of facilities from which one can live comfortable. While, the person who does not get success in life, to live in such condition is hard and become worst afterwards. Thus, by having some amount of pressure from parents is necessary to achieve everything in life. However, there are some negative aspects as well of pressure from guardians. The parents who over pressurise to their children for betterment of their success but the result would be some time reversed. In other words, Juvenile does not want to understand it instead ignore any instruction or guidance coming from parental side. Moreover, the health issue arise and children become stressful. So the mental illness would be the unexpected result. In conclusion, there are both the impact on children of having lots of pressure from guardians. The children have higher chances to grab the job which have huge salary package by using parents experience. However, children will have the mental issues can be the negative impact of over the limit pressure from parents.
In recent time, the
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pressure
from
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parents
is beyond the limit for better future and successful career for their
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children
. Though there is
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positive
impact for
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children
as understand the value of study and afterwards achieve desirable salary and equipped with advance facilities.
However
, the main
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negative
aspect is limitless of
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pressure
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make
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children
stressful.

To
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begin
with, the main development on
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positive
side would be that juvenile will have higher chances of finding proper and
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enough
salaried job.
Firstly
,
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parents
have life long
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experience and
they have awareness about that why success matters in every stage of life. If the
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children
Consider removing 'will'. (Usually, 'will' does not occur in a conditional clause, unless in the sense 'want to' or 'be willing to'.)
will do
best in academic then there are higher probability to find better job which has up to the mark salary package.
As a result
, one can
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purchase
every type of facilities from which one can
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live
comfortable. While, the person who does not
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get
success in life, to
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live
in such condition is
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hard
and become worst afterwards.
Thus
, by having
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some
amount of
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pressure
from
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parents
is necessary to achieve everything in life.

However
, there are
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some
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negative
aspects
as well
of
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pressure
from guardians. The
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parents
who over
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pressurise
to their
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children
for betterment of their success
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but
the result would be
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some
time reversed.
In other words
, Juvenile does not want to understand it
instead
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ignore
any instruction or guidance coming from parental side.
Moreover
, the health issue arise and
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children
become stressful.
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So
the mental illness would be the unexpected result.

In conclusion
, there are both the impact on
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children
of having lots of
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pressure
from guardians. The
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children
have higher chances to grab the job which have huge salary package by using
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parents
experience.
However
,
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children
will have the mental issues can be the
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negative
impact of over the limit
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pressure
from
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parents
.
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IELTS essay 1. Nowadays parents put too much pressure on their children to succeed. Is this a negative or positive development?

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