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03/10/2017In some countries, children start school at the age of four and in other countries at the age of seven. Some people believe that early school start is affecting parent-child relationships. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of starting scho v.1

03/10/2017In some countries, children start school at the age of four and in other countries at the age of seven. Some people believe that early school start is affecting parent-child relationships. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of starting scho v. 1
Over the past few decades, all types of media, including print media and social media platform, has increasingly influenced the understanding of people around the world. It is believed that those who have the power to dominate the media do, in fact, influence audience’s attitudes and opinions as well. Moreover, it is said that the possible solution to rectify this situation is very rare. This essay agrees with the statement and will discuss why those media controllers can almost completely control the mind of the people. The first reason for the issue is that news and technology play a pivotal role in people daily routines. As the conventional ways of news report may be less popular, the online alternatives can completely serve for a similar purpose. When people receive whatever the newspaper or online news providers, they will absorb the attitudes and concepts that the press owner puts in that media. Therefore, media consumers' opinion seems to be influenced by whoever controls the media. Furthermore, another reason is that media developers also investigate an algorithm that manages based on users' interests and worldwide trend. This may not affect those who have access to several resources; however, most individuals tend to spend their time on only one source that they think it is reliable. This gap allows developers to use an algorithm to force each user's feed with what they believe. Consequently, they can control the attitudes of the people towards the current situation. To conclude, this essay discussed why it is undeniable that those with power can control not only the media but the opinions of the people as well. That is because print media and online publications are still practiced in the modern world, and, the technology invented by developers makes it difficult to remedy the situation.
Over the past few decades, all types of
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media
, including print
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media
and social
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media
platform, has
increasingly
influenced the understanding of
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people
around the world. It
is believed
that those who have the power to dominate the
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media
do, in fact, influence audience’s attitudes and opinions
as well
.
Moreover
, it
is said
that the possible solution to rectify this situation is
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very
rare. This essay
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agrees
with the statement and will discuss why those
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media
controllers can almost completely
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control
the mind of the
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people
.

The
first
reason for the issue is that news and technology play a pivotal role in
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people
daily routines. As the conventional ways of news report may be less popular, the online alternatives can completely serve for a similar purpose. When
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people
receive whatever the newspaper or online news providers, they will absorb the attitudes and concepts that the press owner puts in that
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media
.
Therefore
,
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media
consumers' opinion seems to
be influenced
by whoever
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controls
the media.

Furthermore
, another reason is that
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media
developers
also
investigate an algorithm that manages based on users' interests and worldwide trend. This may not affect those who have access to several resources;
however
, most individuals tend to spend their time on
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only
one source that they
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think
it is reliable. This gap
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allows
developers to
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use
an algorithm to force each user's feed with what they believe.
Consequently
, they can
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control
the attitudes of the
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people
towards the
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current
situation.

To conclude
, this essay discussed why it is undeniable that those with power can
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control
not
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only
the
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media
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but
the opinions of the
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people
as well
.
That is
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because
print
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media
and online publications are
still
practiced in the modern world, and, the technology invented by developers
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makes
it difficult to remedy the situation.
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IELTS essay 03/10/2017In some countries, children start school at the age of four and in other countries at the age of seven. Some people believe that early school start is affecting parent-child relationships. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of starting scho v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
298 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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