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In today's modern society where quality of knowledge given by school is rapidly on the verge to develop, one of the main issues is that the number of allotes house tasks to pupils. The most trust that entrants should not be obliged to do a plethora of exercises in school, though, others compete that practices discipline an essential role in the studying of guys. There is no doubt that, there are posts of anything, furthermore, self working and community are both vital in order to build fashionable era. From my point of view, young people do not have to prepare tasks, hence, it might be risky for mental thinking. In the forthcoming paragraphs, use of training and amount of it are doing to be discussed. First of all, teachers should not oblige young people to make home exercises, because, they do not acquire abundance knowledge to work on their own. That's why, they need to be helped by parents, parents cannot retrieve them. For example, they have to attend their children to courses in order to make sons educated. As a consequence, the rate of quality of graduate's studying decreases. Then, that country will no improve in the near future. Secondly, self working and checking can help schoolboys to increase their ability and skills and prepare them for the future. Though, the amount of it should not be more than normal task, so that, their minds will feel tired. For instance, generation with tired brains will not develop the society. Finally, house task are essential, although, it needs to be given in normal quantity. Hence, it is not easy to own self educating. On the contrary, graduates should be given numerous exercises, owing to the fact that, if it is hard in preparation, then it will be simple to beat. In particular, their world outlook will expand, as, they own a plethora of researches. To sum up, the measure of training should be aware of it by alloters. In a light of fact that, they mark their degree. To my mind homework ought ot be allotted good enough by becoming careful with ages, then, there will be changes.
In
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today
's modern society where quality of knowledge
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given
by school is
rapidly
on the verge to develop, one of the main issues is that the number of
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allotes
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house
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tasks
to pupils. The most trust that entrants should not
be obliged
to do a plethora of exercises in school, though, others compete that practices discipline an essential role in the studying of guys. There is no doubt that, there are posts of anything,
furthermore
, self working and community are both vital in order to build fashionable era. From my point of view, young
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people
do not
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have to
prepare
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tasks
,
hence
, it might be risky for mental thinking. In the forthcoming paragraphs,
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use
of training and amount of it are doing to
be discussed
.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, teachers should not oblige young
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people
to
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make
home exercises,
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because
, they do not acquire abundance knowledge to work on their
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own
. That's why, they need to be
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helped
by parents, parents cannot retrieve them.
For example
, they
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
attend their children to courses in order to
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make
sons educated. As a consequence, the rate of quality of graduate's studying decreases. Then, that country will no
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improve
in the near future.

Secondly
, self working and checking can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
schoolboys to increase their ability and
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skills
and prepare them for the future. Though, the amount of it should not be more than normal
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
task
,
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so
that, their minds will feel tired.
For instance
, generation with tired brains will not develop the society.

Finally
,
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house
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
task
are essential, although, it needs to be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
in normal quantity.
Hence
, it is not easy to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
self educating.
On the contrary
, graduates should be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
numerous exercises, owing to the fact that, if it is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
in preparation, then it will be simple to beat.
In particular
, their world outlook will expand, as, they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
a plethora of researches.

To sum up, the measure of training should be aware of it by
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alloters
. In a light of fact that, they mark their degree. To my mind homework ought
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ot
be allotted
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good
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enough
by becoming careful with ages, then, there will be
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changes
.
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5 paragraphs
358 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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