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Writing Task 1 Natural Process The diagram shows the life cycle of the honey bee Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant Write at least 150 words The given picture illustrates the life cyc

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" The given picture illustrates the life cycle of the honey bee. There are six steps in the round, it takes 34-36 days from the form of egg to mature bee. After fertilization of two bees, everythree days, female can lay one or two eggs spending 9-10 days on hatching then. Next five days, egg is broken by nymph which mults 3 times before becoming young adult emerge. It takes 15-16 days, and at these three steps, not like the life cycle of the frog, the shape of the honey bee is the same, it just develop its size. Finally, 34-36 day - life cycle of honey bee finishes, now, bee looks like mature one and can fertilize and work. Due to the helpfullness of honey bee in our life, we have to protect them from harm. " (136 words)
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cycle of the honey bee.

There are six steps in the round, it takes 34-36 days from the form of egg to mature bee.

After fertilization of two bees,
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everythree
days, female can lay one or two eggs spending 9-10 days on hatching then.
Next
five days, egg
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by nymph which
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mults
3 times
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before
becoming young adult emerge. It takes 15-16 days, and at these three steps, not like the
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life
cycle of the frog, the shape of the honey bee is the same, it
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just
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develop
its size.
Finally
, 34-36 day
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life
cycle of honey bee finishes,
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now
, bee looks like mature one and can fertilize and work.

Due to the
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helpfullness
of honey bee in our
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, we
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IELTS academic Writing Task 1 Natural Process The diagram shows the life cycle of the honey bee

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
139 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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