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Writing task 1 .Estimated percentage of car trips by purpose and gender of drivers, in 2005 .

Writing task 1. Estimated percentage of car trips by purpose and gender of drivers, in 2005. bYE3q
The bar chart demonstrates the estimated percentage of car trips which made between male and female for several various purposes in 2005. By and large, the most common one was for working which was used by both gender and the second one was for shopping whilst the percentage of other chores showed substantially low rate. As regards the most popular car trips were made for work seeing that 52 % were men and roughly 40% women. If work became the first highest estimated percentage for men, shopping was the second estimated percentage for women's car trips with 18%. On the other hand, with respect to the percentage of men and women was significantly dissimilar in the remaining occasions. For activities like visiting town, at 9% and recreation at 11%, men were consumed 3 times more % as many as women. In contrast, for bank 8%, running errands9% and visiting friends 7%, women were used approximately 2 times as many as men.
The bar chart demonstrates the estimated
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of car trips which made between male and female for several various purposes in 2005. By and large, the most common one was for working which was
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used
by both gender and the second one was for shopping whilst the
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percentage
of other chores
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showed
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low rate. As regards the most popular car trips
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for work seeing that 52 % were
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men
and roughly 40%
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women
. If work became the
first
highest estimated
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percentage
for
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men
, shopping was the second estimated
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percentage
for women's car trips with 18%.
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, with respect to the
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percentage
of
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men
and
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women
was
significantly
dissimilar in the remaining occasions. For activities like visiting town, at 9% and recreation at 11%,
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men
were consumed
3 times more % as
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many
as
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women
.
In contrast
, for bank 8%, running errands9% and visiting friends 7%,
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women
were
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used
approximately 2 times as
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as
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IELTS academic Writing task 1. Estimated percentage of car trips by purpose and gender of drivers, in 2005.

Academic
  American English
1 paragraphs
161 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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