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The table below shows the results of a 20-year study into why adults in the UK attend arts events. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the results of a 20-year study into why adults in the UK attend arts events. Wy5ga
The table illustrates numerous reasons of why adults in the UK participating in arts occasion in the last 20 years. First, as we can see most people attending these events is order to observe specific performer or artist that they adored. This reason is taking account for more than 50% reasons for participating the arts and only has slightly differences throughout the years. The next thing worth mentioning is special occasion. This seems to be a fairly popular reason of why people attended arts events 20 years ago but the number decrease from 27% to 20% in the next 10 years and fell down to only 9% nowadays. On the other hand, Accompanying children has gained its popularity over the years when sky rocketed from only 9% to 24% and show a huge potential of keep growing in the future. The last reason of why people seems to consider when attending arts occasions is work, the percentage of this reason can be describe as insignificant when it only fluctuate around 10% in the last 20 years.
The table illustrates numerous
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of why adults in the UK participating in
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occasion in the last 20 years.

First
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most
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people
attending these
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events
is order to observe specific performer or artist that they adored. This
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reason
is taking account for more than 50%
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reasons
for participating the
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arts
and
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only
has
slightly
differences throughout the years.

The
next
thing worth mentioning is special occasion. This seems to be a
fairly
popular
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reason
of why
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people
attended
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arts
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events
20 years ago
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the number decrease from 27% to 20% in the
next
10 years and fell down to
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only
9% nowadays.
On the other hand
, Accompanying children has gained its popularity over the years when
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sky rocketed
from
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only
9% to 24% and
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show
a huge potential of
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keep
growing in the future.

The last
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to consider when attending
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occasions is work, the percentage of this
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as insignificant when it
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around 10% in the last 20 years.

IELTS academic The table below shows the results of a 20-year study into why adults in the UK attend arts events.

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4 paragraphs
176 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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