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The diagrams shows how concretes is produced and how it is used in gravel making

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The diagram illustrates the ways by which cement is made also, how it is then used in concrete. Overall, it is clear that limestone and clay passes through four stages before cement is ready for use. And while cement production requires several equipments, concrete making needs ones one. Firstly, limestone and clay are crush into powder then pour into the mixer which combine them to form a powder. Thereafter, it is pass into the rotating heat. This machine has a constant supply of heat from an opposite edge. After what, the heated powder is then ground and cement is produce, bagged and ready for use. On the other hand, gravels most numerous ingredients for concrete making accounting for 50% of the total what is required. Followed by sand which 20%. Cement make up 15%. Lastly water is 10%. However, they are all put into the concrete mixer which mixes it and eventually produce concrete.

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use
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On the other hand
, gravels most numerous ingredients for concrete making accounting for 50% of the total what is required
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 up 15%. Lastly
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IELTS academic The diagrams shows how concretes is produced and how it is used in gravel making

Academic

American English

3 paragraphs

154 words

6.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

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Lexical Resource: 6.0

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Grammatical Range: 6.5

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Task Achievement: 6.5

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