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Some people believe that if a police officers carries guns, it can encourage a higher level of violence. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that if a police officers carries guns, it can encourage a higher level of violence. 9LQG7
The graph illustrates the population index of a turtles in India from 1980 to 2012. Overall, it is clearly seen that only olive ridley turtles were grown majorly in terms of population, whereas leatherback and green turtles population dropping dramatically. While all other species were shown as stable growth. To begin with leatherback turtles species had Rose significantly till 1996, after that it started fluctuating and reached around 130 in the year 2012. furthermore, olive ridley's population was increasing till 1986 and reached above 110 from 100 in 1980, after that the figure started dropping and marked lowest index( 60 ) in 2012. Coming to green turtles, throughout the period, figure of population was fluctuating many times and at the end it was stayed at around 90 though at beginning it had 100 index in 1980. Moreover, all other on species was quite stable during 1980 to 2012, therefore in the year 1980 it had index 100 and at the end of 2012 it was slightly increased( around 10 points more)
The graph illustrates the
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was increasing till 1986 and reached above 110 from 100 in 1980, after that the figure
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dropping and marked lowest index
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in 2012.

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100 and at the
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of 2012 it was
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IELTS academic Some people believe that if a police officers carries guns, it can encourage a higher level of violence.

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