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Writing task 1. about Everague annual expenditure on cell phone and residential phone services, 2001 to 2010

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The graph indicate median yearly expenses on mobile phone and Residential services from 2001 t0 2010. In general, the mobile phone services climbed remakably. In contras the residential phone services decreased considerably. In details, spending began by marely $200 of on cell phone services in 2001. Then from 2002 to 2003 this figure rise slowly to little more than $300. Beside that on cell phone services expences dramatically declined, to $600 in 2007. Next, In 2001 spending oh Residential phone services decrease below $700. While in 2002 to 2006 the amount of annual expenditure on the Residential phone service was down $600, and then between 2007 and 2008 this gigure derease again to about $480. Finally in 2009 to 2010 cost of on Residential phone service still down been $400.
The graph
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indicate
median yearly expenses on mobile
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phone
and
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Residential
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services
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from 2001 t0 2010
.
In general
, the mobile
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phone
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services
climbed
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remakably
. In
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contras
the
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residential
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phone
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services
decreased
considerably
.

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In
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details
, spending began by
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marely
$200 of on cell
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phone
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services
in 2001. Then from 2002 to 2003 this figure rise
slowly
to
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little
more than $300. Beside that on cell
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phone
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services
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expences
dramatically
declined, to $600 in 2007.
Next
,

In 2001 spending oh
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Residential
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phone
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services
decrease below $700. While in 2002 to 2006 the amount of annual expenditure on the
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Residential
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phone
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service
was down $600, and then between 2007 and 2008 this
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gigure
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derease
again to about $480.
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Finally
in 2009 to 2010 cost of on
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Residential
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phone
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service
still
down been $400.

IELTS academic Writing task 1. about Everague annual expenditure on cell phone and residential phone services, 2001 to 2010

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
130 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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