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What will it be like to travel in the future? Will normal cars remain or will they fly? I think everyone wants to know the answer to this question. In my opinion, people will not travel in a flying car or bus in 50 years. Maybe it is because science will not be that advanced. Although there are movies these days where cars do not go the normal way, they “fly” in the air. It is more than likely that new vehicles will appear that people will enjoy using. Even today, more and more vehicles are appearing. However, unfortunately I am not a scientist and I do not see into the future, so I can only express my own opinion. I want to win the prize because I want to buy a new car. I am also interested in the issue of travel in the future or galaxy travel, so I might support a little bit of research into this.
What will it be like to
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travel
in the future? Will normal
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cars
remain or will they
fly
? I
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think
everyone wants to know the answer to this question.

In my opinion,
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people
will not
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travel
in a flying
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car
or bus in 50 years. Maybe it is
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because
science will not be that advanced. Although there are movies these
It is better to use 'days' with the time-relative pronoun 'when': "days when". (Alternatively, use 'in/on which')
days where
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cars
do not go the normal way, they “
fly
” in the air.

It is more than likely that new vehicles will appear that
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people
will enjoy using. Even
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today
, more and more vehicles
The verb 'appearing' is a stative verb and sometimes the progressive form is not correct. Try a simple form instead.
are appearing
.
However
, unfortunately I am not a scientist and I do not
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see
into the future,
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so
I can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
express my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
opinion.

I want to win the prize
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because
I want to
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buy
a new
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car
. I am
also
interested in the issue of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
travel
in the future or galaxy
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
travel
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
I might support a
Reduce redundancy by using "little" or "bit".
little bit
of research into this.

IELTS academic Write your article in a in-flight magazine

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
160 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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