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The plan illustrates the proposal for a town.

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The plan illustrates the proposal for a town. Overall, it is clear that most of the area will be occupied by housing. In addition, the proposal overall shape of the town will be rectangular. In the centre of the town, a large square will be used for parking and for bus stands. Moreover, four roads will be provided access to this square, and these roads all lead to a ring road. Near the centre of the town, there will be housing and four recreational areas. Especially, three of which will be close to each other. On the outskirts of the town, outside the ring roads, there will have more housing constructed and stretched in the circular direction of the area. These areas only have just one recreational area, where close to the centre of town and divided by the ring road. Besides, the housing will be located separately from two areas, which are proposed for industrial purposes. One section for industry is shown at the top of the diagram, and the other place is shown at the bottom. Finally, roads will separate the industry from the housing.
The plan illustrates the proposal for a town.

Overall
, it is
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clear
that most of the
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area
will
be occupied
by housing.
In addition
, the proposal
overall
shape of the
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town
will be rectangular.

In the
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centre
of the
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town
, a large square will be
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used
for parking and for bus stands.
Moreover
, four
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roads
will
be provided
access to this square, and these
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roads
all lead to a ring
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road
. Near the
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centre
of the
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town
, there will be housing and four recreational
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areas
.
Especially
, three of which will be close to each other.

On the outskirts of the
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town
, outside the ring
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roads
, there will have more housing constructed and stretched in the circular direction of the
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area
. These
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areas
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only
have
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just
one recreational
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area
, where close to the
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centre
of
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town
and divided by the ring
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road
.
Besides
, the housing will
be located
separately
from two
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areas
, which
are proposed
for industrial purposes. One section for industry
is shown
at the top of the diagram, and the other place
is shown
at the bottom.
Finally
,
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roads
will separate the industry from the housing.

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