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The rendered flowchart illustrates how different colours of plastic paper clips are manufactured in a small factor.

The rendered flowchart illustrates how different colours of plastic paper clips are manufactured in a small factor. 0EJn5
A myopic look at the chart makes it conspicuous that the production process starts by melting the plastics and ends with packing and dispatching of the clips. Firstly, the molten plastic gets moulded into paper clips in three different colours which are red, blue, and yellow in a small factory. Following that, these clips are checked for strength by the machine, and if some of them are of low quality then they get rejected. Moreover, the clips of higher quality are sorted according to their colours by hand. In brief, the clips of a mixed and single colour are get separated. After that, the quality of mixed colour as well as single colour clips get examined again by the personnel. Once they have been checked, the clips of different colours get packed by the workers and once they get ready, they dispatched to sell in the market.
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it conspicuous that the production process
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starts
by melting the plastics and ends with packing and dispatching of the clips.

Firstly
, the molten plastic
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gets
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moulded
into paper
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clips
in three
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different
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colours
which
are red
, blue, and yellow in a
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small
factory. Following that, these
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clips
are
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checked
for strength by the machine, and if
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some
of them are of low quality then they
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get
rejected.
Moreover
, the
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clips
of higher quality
are sorted
according to their
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colours
by hand.
In brief
, the
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clips
of a mixed and single
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colour
are
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get
separated. After that, the quality of mixed
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colour
as well
as single
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colour
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clips
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get
examined again by the personnel. Once they have been
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checked
, the
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clips
of
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different
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colours
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get
packed by the workers and once they
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get
ready, they dispatched to sell in the market.
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IELTS academic The rendered flowchart illustrates how different colours of plastic paper clips are manufactured in a small factor.

Academic
  American English
2 paragraphs
147 words
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