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The pie chart elucidates the number of visitors to Ashdown museum during the year and the year after its refurbished, Furthermore it also outage the results of survey asking visitors how satisfied during two different periods. The total number of visitors before renovation were 74000 whereas it got increased to 92000 later. Before the replacement the very satisfied were just one fourth but after the works done it got a rise up to 35%, Moreover Satisfied also were initially at 30% and got a slight increase to 40% which has a variation of 10%, Meanwhile the Dissatisfied got a sudden down between years before and after the work at first it was 40% but now its one fourth of overall. Very Dissatisfied were in 10% but later it got reduced to 5%. The no response persons remains the same for both the situations before and after the convection.
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