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Write a passage about the benefits of the Internet

Write a passage about the benefits of the Internet N8A1b
As we know, the Internet has been an important part of our everyday life. Almost every aspect of life all over the world is concerned with the Internet. People can use the Internet to do a lot of things. Firstly, Internet can be a source of information at home. People needn’t go to news stands to buy newspapers or magazines. They can get information about weather easily and at any time as well. Secondly, Internet is a source of entertainment. People can watch films, or listen to their favorite songs or even play interesting games on the Internet. And this doesn’t cost as much. In addition, the Internet is also a good means of education. Students and schoolchildren now can use the Internet as a useful and time- saving device by on-line schools or on-line lessons. Moreover, Internet can be said a wonderful means for people in their self-study. In sum, the Internet plays an essential role in the development of society and man’s knowledge and life. However, Internet itself has disadvantages. People should use the Internet correctly to take its full advantages.
As we know, the Internet has been an
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important
part of our everyday life. Almost every aspect of life all over the world
is concerned
with the Internet.
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People
can
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use
the Internet to do
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a lot of
things.

Firstly
, Internet can be a source of information at home.
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People
needn’t go to
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news stands
to
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buy
newspapers or magazines. They can
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get
information about weather
easily
and at any time
as well
.

Secondly
, Internet is a source of entertainment.
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People
can
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watch
films, or listen to their favorite songs or even play interesting games on the Internet. And this doesn’t cost as much.

In addition
, the Internet is
also
a
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good
means of education. Students and schoolchildren
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now
can
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use
the Internet as a useful and time- saving device by on-line schools or on-line lessons.
Moreover
, Internet can
be said
a wonderful means for
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people
in their self-study.

In sum, the Internet plays an essential role in the development of society and
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man
’s knowledge and life.
However
, Internet itself has disadvantages.
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People
should
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use
the Internet
correctly
to take its full advantages.

IELTS academic Write a passage about the benefits of the Internet

Academic
  American English
5 paragraphs
183 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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