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Estimated sales of gold in dubai for 12 months

Estimated sales of gold in dubai for 12 months MBX2Q
The line graph depicts the information about amount of gold sales in dubai throughout the year 2002. This sales amount is given in millions of Dirhams. At the first glance it reveals that the highest amount of sales were done in March and the least were in july and september. Initially, in first month of the year sales were nearly 200 million Dirhams. After a month sales were increased gradually afterwards sales were increased steadily to reach 350 million Dirhams in march which was highest in whole year. Then sales begin falling to the lowest amount in July, which was nearly 110 million Dirhams. In August the sales were increased to double closed to 200 milion then fall down to lowest point. Afterwards in September sales were again increased moderately till December and end of the year the amount was approximately 200 milion Dirhams. In summary, march was the best month for Dubai Gold sales in the year 2002 and throughout the year the sale volume fluctuated keeping an appointment average of 180 milion of Dirham per month.
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dubai
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2002. This
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Dirhams
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Dirhams
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Dirhams
. In summary, march was the best
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for Dubai Gold
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sales
in the
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2002 and throughout the
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volume fluctuated keeping an appointment average of 180
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milion
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IELTS academic Estimated sales of gold in dubai for 12 months

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