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Write a paragraph of about 150 words comparing the number of tourists visiting Dubai from 1990 to 1994 from Russia and other countries.

Write a paragraph of about 150 words comparing the number of tourists visiting Dubai from 1990 to 1994 from Russia and other countries. 6aLeW
The line graph shows the number of tourists visiting Dubai between the 1990 and 1994. The line graph has the number of tourists who visited Dubai from Russia and other countries. At the start of the line graph total tourists number is 400. 000 in 1990. At that year Dubai has no tourists from Russia. All tourists came from other countries. One year later, tourists number increasing highly. The total tourists number reached 600. 000 in 1991. This is the biggest increasing at the line graph. This increasing equal with between 1993 and 1994 increasing. After 1991, this increasing started to slow. Because tourists number who came from other countries fixed at nearly 600. 000. But tourists number who came from Russia is still increasing. In 1992 tourists number reached nearly 700. 000. Between 1992 and 1993, this increase started to accelerate and tourists number reached 800. 000. Day by day tourists number increased who came from Russia. At the end of the line graph, total tourists number reached 1 million. 400. 000 of the tourists numbers were from Russia. Russian tourists important for Dubai’s tourism.
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visiting Dubai between the 1990 and 1994. The
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has the
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of
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visited Dubai from Russia and other countries.

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is 400. 000 in 1990. At that year Dubai has no
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from Russia. All
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tourists
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came
from other countries. One year later,
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. The total
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600. 000 in 1991. This is the biggest
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at the
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. This
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equal with between 1993 and 1994
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. After 1991, this
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. In 1992
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700. 000. Between 1992 and 1993, this increase
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to accelerate and
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reached
800. 000. Day by day
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increased
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who
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from Russia. At the
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, total
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1 million. 400. 000 of the
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were from Russia. Russian
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important
for Dubai’s tourism.
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IELTS academic Write a paragraph of about 150 words comparing the number of tourists visiting Dubai from 1990 to 1994 from Russia and other countries.

Academic
  American English
2 paragraphs
186 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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