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Women and Men Strengths and Weaknesses

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Recently there are several points of view on male and female equality. Women are actively fighting for their rights and opportunities, making great progress. Nevertheless, the lists of professions which don't allow to employ women representatives still exist. Many claim that women and men have different strengths and weaknesses and there is no point to involve women in inherently male professions. However, I guess this issue is much more multifaceted than it's usually presented. The motivation for the adoption of such prohibitions is not based at all on the fact that a woman is worse than a man. And not on the fact that she will not do some types of work as well as a man. Usually, it's explained by the ability of women to have kids. So such restrictions are established to save the health of women: they are not allowed to work in conditions where they can become infertile or birth unhealthy children. For example, in Belarus work as an aircraft engine repair mechanic, blacksmith or ship boilermaker is forbidden for women. However, such well-intentioned restrictions on the one hand lead to limited thinking of girls since childhood. Many women do not even think about going into a serious and sometimes difficult profession because of prohibitions or male domination in the fields of manufacturing, chemistry, and airplane construction. At the same time, salaries in these areas are higher than in stereotypically female professions - kindergarten teacher, pediatrician, psychologist. The question of gender taboos in professions will not be probably solved soon. Anyway, there will be no gender equality while women have 'employment stop lists'. Governments perceive a woman not only as a means of increasing the population but as a person capable of making a choice.
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fighting for their rights and opportunities, making great progress.
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which don't
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to employ
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different
strengths and weaknesses and there is no point to involve
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male
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.
However
, I guess this issue is much more multifaceted than it's
usually
presented.

The motivation for the adoption of such prohibitions is not based at all on the fact that a woman is worse than a
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man
. And not on the fact that she will not do
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types of work
as well
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man
.
Usually
, it's
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explained
by the ability of
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women
to have kids.
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restrictions
are established
to save the health of
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women
: they are not
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allowed
to work in conditions where they can become infertile or birth unhealthy children.
For example
, in Belarus work as an aircraft engine repair mechanic, blacksmith or ship boilermaker
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for women.

However
, such
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well-intentioned
restrictions on the one hand lead to limited thinking of girls since childhood.
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do not even
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about going into a serious and
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difficult
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profession
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of prohibitions or male domination in the fields of manufacturing, chemistry, and airplane construction. At the same time, salaries in
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areas
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professions
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kindergarten teacher, pediatrician, psychologist.

The question of gender taboos in
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professions
will not be
probably
solved
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soon
. Anyway, there will be no gender equality while
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women
have 'employment
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lists'.

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Governments
perceive a woman not
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as a means of increasing the population
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as a person capable of making a choice.

IELTS academic Women and Men Strengths and Weaknesses

Academic
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289 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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