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The graph shows the proportion of money spent on books from 1995 to 2005.

The graph shows the proportion of money spent on books from 1995 to 2005. rGB0L
The given lines graph illustrates the amount of money which was spent on books in 4 European countries between 1995 and 2005. From the first glance, it can be observed that although the rate of all countries showed an increase regularly, Germany rate witnessed higher degree than other countries over the whole period. At the start of the period the proportion of money that spent on books in Germany was 80 million dollars and it was the highest level among 4 countries, wheares this number in Austria were less of 50 million dollars than in Germany. France and Italy rate was almost equal 55 and 50 million dollars respectively. After a decade, the number of all countries showed some gradual changes. Germany rate rose minimally by the end of the given timeframe and reach a high point ( approximately 95 million dollars ). On the contrary, the quantity of Italy witnessed the lowest point at the end of the dedicated era. The sum of money which spent on books in France and Austria have some slight recovery and reach nearly equal level, 73 and 71 million dollars respectively.
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between 1995 and 2005.

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of all
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, Germany
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witnessed higher degree than other
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over the whole period.

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of the period the proportion of money that spent on books in Germany was 80
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and it was the highest level among 4
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than in Germany. France and Italy
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was almost equal 55 and 50
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respectively
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gradual
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timeframe and reach a high point
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approximately 95
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of the dedicated era. The sum of money which spent on books in France and Austria have
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