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why you have to help people in difficulty? Write an essay to express your opinion

why you have to help people in difficulty? Write an essay to express your opinion 0aE69
Because of her disease, she must be absent from school. Ms. Tam is gotten rare neurological disorder that makes her health weaker and weaker, and her hands are disabled, so she can’t hold anything. Her house is empty; in the middle of the house is just a tiny plastic table, on which there is a cup of incense and a picture of the fortunate woman leaning on an old bed. Some of her relatives said that her mom suddenly passed away, her father was deaf and mute, her senior brother is a teenager, and Tam was bedridden. While her father and brother were burning an incense for her mother, Tam's tears kept pouring out in helplessness, because her two hands contorted and could not hold anything. While her father and brother were burning an incense for her mother, Tam's tears kept pouring out in helplessness, because her two hands contorted and could not hold anything.
Because
of her disease, she
must
be absent from school. Ms. Tam
is gotten
rare neurological disorder that
makes
her health weaker and weaker, and her hands
are disabled
,
so
she can’t hold anything. Her
house
is empty; in the middle of the
house
is
just
a tiny plastic table, on which there is a cup of incense and a picture of the fortunate woman leaning on an
old
bed.
Some
of her relatives said that her mom
suddenly
passed away, her father was deaf and mute, her senior brother is a
teenager
, and Tam was bedridden. While her father and brother were burning an incense for her mother, Tam's tears
kept
pouring out in helplessness,
because
her two hands contorted and could not hold anything. While her father and brother were burning an incense for her mother, Tam's tears
kept
pouring out in helplessness,
because
her two hands contorted and could not hold anything.
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IELTS academic why you have to help people in difficulty? Write an essay to express your opinion

Academic
  American English
1 paragraphs
155 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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