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Overall, the process can be broken down into 3 main phases: the collection of clays, the manufacture

Overall, the process can be broken down into 3 main phases: the collection of clays, the manufacture xx8bg
The diagram illustrate how the manufacture bricks processed for building industry. Overall, the process can be broken down into 3 main phases: the collection of clays, the manufacture of products from clays, and the packaging, delivery. First, using a digger, clays are scooped up. The clays collected will subsequently be filtered onto a metal grid. After purifying, the raw materials are mixed with sand and water. Then, the mixture can be formed to bricks by a wire cutter which can carefully cut to the exact size, or a mould would be more direct.
The diagram illustrate how the manufacture bricks processed for building industry.

Overall
, the process can
be broken
down into 3 main phases: the collection of
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clays
, the manufacture of products from
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
clays
, and the packaging, delivery.

First
, using a digger,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
clays
are scooped
up. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
clays
collected will
subsequently
be filtered
onto a metal grid. After purifying, the raw materials
are mixed
with sand and water. Then, the mixture can
be formed
to bricks by a wire cutter which can
carefully
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cut
to the exact size, or a
Possible spelling mistake. 'mould' is British English.
mould
would be more direct.
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IELTS academic Overall, the process can be broken down into 3 main phases: the collection of clays, the manufacture

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  American English
3 paragraphs
93 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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