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“WHILE” AT THE BEGINNING OF A SENTENCE USUALLY REQUIRES A 2ND CLAUSE. MAYBE A COMMA, QUESTION OR EXCLAMATION MARK IS MISSING, OR THE SENTENCE IS INCOMPLETE AND SHOULD BE JOINED WITH THE FOLLOWING SENTENCE.

“WHILE” AT THE BEGINNING OF A SENTENCE USUALLY REQUIRES A 2ND CLAUSE. MAYBE A COMMA, QUESTION OR EXCLAMATION MARK IS MISSING, OR THE SENTENCE IS INCOMPLETE AND SHOULD BE JOINED WITH THE FOLLOWING SENTENCE. PMoaE

The diagram illustrates the difficulties people have when they integrate into a new country and the variety of problems according to the youth. There are three main common challenges that all age groups ought to face: Sorting out finances, sorting out healthcare and finding schools for their children. The greatest trouble for the middle age group (35-54) as well as the oldest group (over 55) is culling out healthcare. Calculations show that the highest proportion of same 37% and more than 35% a tiny, respectively. While the same problem that the younger group (18-34) faced is noted approximately 32%. Moreover, 35% of the middle age group find relating to money the most serious problem compare with the other group. However, it is biggest problem of the young group, occupied around 34% and the percentage of people in the rest group is much lower, at 28% percent. Finally, finding a school for children becomes the largest issue of the age group from 35 to 54 with nearly 20%, this number is not significant compared to the previous two problems but it is the most when compared to the other two groups. The older group holds the least with only 2 percent. Also, just over 5% of the same issue is covered by the young group. In general, the middle age group has to deal with all problems most. Meanwhile, sorting out finances and healthcare is also difficult which all of the ages have to face.

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